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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #350 on: November 15, 2012, 12:58:51 AM »
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #351 on: November 19, 2012, 01:54:33 PM »
I really do love your stories. They're very sweet and slice of life, but they have so much creativity to them! I also really like Mr. Payne as kind of a legacy character that ties everything together. He actually reminds me somewhat of The Doctor from Dr. Who, except that Mr. Payne isn't much of a harbinger of tragedy. He's quite the opposite really. Point being, I'm eighty percent sure he's a Time Lord.

And I just have an itty-bitty bit of a critique. I really like the May-December romance going on with Leo/Sunflower and Laurie/Marigold. I think it's a nice way of saying how even though they're old in body, they still have youthful, vibrant souls and hearts. What rubs me the wrong way a bit is how when Leo proposed to Sunflower, he already had a Young Again potion in reserve, and gave it to her as essentially an early wedding present. I know that it's meant to be a really sweet gesture, but I kind of saw it as a bit of an undermine, like Leo was implying that he'd only marry Sunflower if she was younger. I know that that's not what you were trying to say, and you meant it as a sweet gesture, and I have absolutely no problem with the twins getting Young Again potions in some way, because yes, they did just start living, but I did not like when and how they got them. To me, I think it would have sat better if Leo either told the girls what he was doing and they kept it an open conversation throughout, or if the girls had no idea that the potions came from Leo.

Everything else is wonderful though. I can't wait for the wedding!

Thanks very much for the feedback, Gwendy.  It didn't occur to me that it would appear that Leo was only interested in Sunflower if she would agree to become younger, but I understand what you're saying.  The way I saw it, Leo was in love with Sunflower and didn't really care about her age.  But he knew that she cared about it - she and Marigold had come to Sunset Valley to die, essentially.  They were "waiting for Grim".  I saw Leo and the Young Again potion more as him offering her a real alternative rather than making it a condition of their relationship.  I'm sorry if my writing didn't make that clear enough.

And to those waiting for an update, please be patient a little longer.  I've been so engrossed in the Mission Highly Unlikely story, that I think I'm going to have to finish that one off before I can return to the Flowers and the Treatment Centre.  But it won't be too much longer now.  Thanks for understanding.
 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #352 on: December 31, 2012, 07:50:28 AM »
Milk and a bit of salt has undone many a burnt dish, and some spices and reheating does the rest.

That's so true and if you still can't get it quite right I find just a hint of sugar or honey does the trick!
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #353 on: December 31, 2012, 07:55:43 AM »
I really do love your stories. They're very sweet and slice of life, but they have so much creativity to them! I also really like Mr. Payne as kind of a legacy character that ties everything together. He actually reminds me somewhat of The Doctor from Dr. Who, except that Mr. Payne isn't much of a harbinger of tragedy. He's quite the opposite really. Point being, I'm eighty percent sure he's a Time Lord.
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Oh wow didn't even think of that and I love Dr Who!!! I'm dying for the new series to come to South Africa's screens....

Hey Schip You created another Full-Blood Time Lord!! YAY Schip!!!
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #354 on: December 31, 2012, 07:58:21 AM »
Schip other members and I have said this many times and each time it is just as true: You really should write a book! Maybe a Sim Novel for all those simmers out there without internet access or who haven't discovered our forum yet!!!! Can't wait for the next update!!!
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #355 on: January 21, 2013, 10:57:27 AM »
This story has been lagging for some time, and I think it's time I declared it finished.  It is essentially done in that it has reached the conclusion I intended for it.  Somehow I got the idea that it would be nice to finish with a big splashy double wedding, but to be honest (and I think anyone who reads my stories knows this), pretty weddings just aren't my strength or my interest.  I wanted the Flowers sisters to have a second chance at a happy life, and they're ready to embark on their new life now.  Perhaps I might revisit their lives sometime in the future, or perhaps not.  In any case, I do think I'm ready to close their story with "they lived happily ever after."

I'd like to say a little bit about why I started this story.  I was out with some friends one day, wonderful women who are all a bit older than I, and several of them were talking about feeling useless - now that they were older, not working or raising children, there seemed to be no place for them in society.  They had become irrelevant.  Personally, I like being useless, so it was a bit hard for me to understand their perspective, but I thought about it.  Older women, many of whom have spent their lives looking after others, are often shunted aside and ignored.  Even here in the forum's stories, when I started this story, it seemed to me that all the stories tended to be about younger Sims.  Oh, there were all the Elders in the Immortal Dynasties, of course, because the Dynasty rules require them.  But where were the stories featuring Elders just because they're interesting in their own right?  I thought they could be interesting, and that's why I started this story.

Of course, real life doesn't come with Young Again potions.  But being valued for who one is, is a potent rejuvenator, and that would be my wish for all Elders.

In response to a request, Laurie is going to be uploaded to the Swap Shop in the next few days.  I do think he's quite an attractive Sim, but I can't make any promises that his extraordinary (and to me, inexplicable) cooking skills will come with him!

Thanks very much to everyone who has taken the time to read this story and leave comments.
 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #356 on: January 21, 2013, 11:04:45 AM »
I must salute you for another great story, Schipperke. Sunflower and Marigold's journey was one that I've enjoyed ever since it began. Once again, you've shown me another way to think about the Sims. I'm glad our heroines found their purpose, and I'm glad that they've received their happy ending.

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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #357 on: January 21, 2013, 12:29:10 PM »
Schip, this was a beautiful, emotional adventure I'll not easily forget. I got the point of the story long ago. I myself have a saying: "Old people just want to feel useful." Learning that at a very young age is a privilege I had only because my grandmother is the most fervent servant of family I have come across in all my life. All she says half the time is "I will never not be there for my children" It breaks my heart to see how her children still make her suffer at 80 because they don't see beyond their lust for acquisition and pleasure... But she has successfully raised one heart to appreciate this truth. To appreciate her. She deserves better. She deserves rest. I wish I could grant her that... But in a divided family she'll always be her daughter's slave :(
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Plans and Further Revelations from Leo
« Reply #358 on: January 21, 2013, 12:33:28 PM »
Schip, this was a beautiful, emotional adventure I'll not easily forget. I got the point of the story long ago. I myself have a saying: "Old people just want to feel useful." Learning that at a very young age is a privilege I had only because my grandmother is the most fervent servant of family I have come across in all my life. All she says half the time is "I will never not be there for my children" It breaks my heart to see how her children still make her suffer at 80 because they don't see beyond their lust for acquisition and pleasure... But she has successfully raised one heart to appreciate this truth. To appreciate her. She deserves better. She deserves rest. I wish I could grant her that... But in a divided family she'll always be her daughter's slave :(

Donatello, thank you so much for sharing that.  You have the gift of being able to appreciate other peoples' good qualities, and it is indeed a rare and special gift.  I'm sure your grandmother appreciates her good fortune in having you as a grandson, whatever the other family members may think.
 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Completed
« Reply #359 on: January 21, 2013, 04:14:07 PM »
This story was wonderful. Simmers love to set the elder age as short as possible. Elders can be fun to play too! I love how you play the sisters. I'm not a elder yet, but if I was a elder sim, I want you as a watcher. :)

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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Completed
« Reply #360 on: January 21, 2013, 05:42:59 PM »
I agree with all these comments. I think it's beautiful that you wrote this story to fill a need in society. If only the world were more like a Schipperke story!
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Completed
« Reply #361 on: January 21, 2013, 05:51:42 PM »
If only the world were more like a Schipperke story!

Rosa, I think you've hit the nail on the head as to why I play this game.  Because it allows me to create a world free of the imperfections I see around me.  And it allows my imperfect Sims to have a chance at a better life, something that unfortunately doesn't always happen in the real world.  I suspect a lot of us play this game because it allows us to make a world the way we would like it to be. 

As always, Rosa, your insightfulness continues to impress me.

I'm not a elder yet, but if I was a elder sim, I want you as a watcher. :)

Louise, I think any watcher would be honoured to have you as a Sim in their game!
 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Completed
« Reply #362 on: January 22, 2013, 12:38:58 PM »
Well, I don't know what to say. Thank you, Schip.
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Completed
« Reply #363 on: January 23, 2013, 04:43:09 AM »
Thank you for the nice words, Schip. :)

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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim - Completed
« Reply #364 on: January 23, 2013, 11:28:33 AM »
Laurie is now in the Swap Shop.
 
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