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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #50 on: June 04, 2011, 10:37:38 AM »
Chapter Six

Marigold and Sunflower arrive in Sunset Valley hoping for congenial surroundings in which to continue waiting for Grim.  The taxi drops them off at the property they purchased online.



Sunflower:  "Mature landscaping"?  The plants are all dead!
Marigold:  "Cozy cottage"?  It's tiny!
Sunflower:  The siding is pretty.
Marigold:  Maybe it's bigger than it looks.  Let's look at the inside.

They open the door.



Marigold:  Oh, my stars!



Sunflower:  It's an outhouse!
Marigold:  A men's outhouse, no less.
Sunflower:  "Unique," all right.  As for "potential" - that's about all it has.
Marigold:  Do you realize we spent all the money we had on an outhouse we can't even use?  What will we do?  

Tears begin to fall as they realize that they are in the same position as too many old women:  alone, poor, unwanted, and with nothing to do but wait for Grim.




Dear Readers, I hope you will forgive a bit of editorializing at this point.  Because there is a sad truth in what has happened to Marigold and Sunflower.  When it comes to purchasing property, "Buyer Beware".  Many real estate agents are honourable, dedicated and trustworthy people.  But there are a few bad actors in any profession, and our girls were taken in by an unscrupulous con artist wanting to make a sale at any cost.  I would hope there aren't any houses quite like this one on the market in real life, but if you search for "real estate euphemisms" you'll find all the expressions used in the description that fooled our girls.  Buyer beware.  

I apologize for the off-topic comments, and now the editorial ends.
 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #51 on: June 04, 2011, 11:40:30 AM »
Aww, poor girls! What are they going to do? ;D



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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #52 on: June 04, 2011, 04:12:52 PM »
I am not sure how I missed this story, but as usual, it is outstanding.  It really is very good Schipperke.  It looks like I will have alot of catching up to do when I get my computer set back up next weekend.
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« Reply #53 on: June 04, 2011, 04:15:35 PM »
Woo, that is quite a mission they got themselves into! Poor Marigold and Sunflower *sniff*
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« Reply #54 on: June 04, 2011, 07:44:00 PM »
Omg I can't believe I just found this story.
I feel bad for them, I know how they feel cause when my family bought our new house there was a lot wrong with it. Not near as bad, but still.  :-[

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« Reply #55 on: June 05, 2011, 08:53:50 AM »
Wow, thats even worse than Riches Galore's house.
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #56 on: June 05, 2011, 09:42:41 AM »
Wow, thats even worse than Riches Galore's house.

Yeah, I think I'm getting a reputation as the worst builder on the forum.  Sadly, that reputation is likely well deserved!   ;D  Although even I could do a little better than this.  I hope.
 
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« Reply #57 on: June 05, 2011, 09:49:05 AM »
Chapter Seven

Marigold and Sunflower decide a shopping trip might help to distract them from their many problems.  Not that they can afford to buy anything, but they can't stand around in the outhouse all day so they may as well go look at clothes. 



At the Consignment Store, they gaze wistfully at the racks of pretty clothes, wishing they could afford to replace the rags they're wearing.  Neither notices the grey-suited figure approaching.  Marigold gets a shock when she turns and finds herself facing the man from her dream.



He beams at her and says:  Welcome, ladies, welcome!  I am right, am I not - you are new to our fair town?  So how are you finding Sunset Valley?

Marigold was always told not to talk to strangers.  But she finds herself telling the little man about everything:  the disastrous house, their poverty, the loveseat being repossessed, the abusive family who wouldn't even buy shoes for them.



Sunflower joins the conversation and says:   We were never allowed to have any friends either, and we're both total social incompetents.  All the new schools in town don't benefit us at all.  What we need is a school where we could learn to be human beings.
The man in grey says thoughtfully:  Yes ... I think what you have in mind is a sort of finishing school.
Marigold concludes:  So we've come to Sunset Valley to wait for Grim.  He said he'd be coming for us soon.
The man in grey responds:  Well, don't hold your breath waiting for him.  Grim is notoriously unreliable.  Definitely not to be trusted.  Meanwhile, you need a place to stay.  Here's the address of the Fire Station.  There's a free shelter there with everything you'll need until you get back on your feet.  The Consignment Shop is always getting donations of clothing.  Give them your phone number and they'll call you if something comes in that's your size.  And be sure to check your mailbox, eh?  You wouldn't want to miss any more important mail!  Don't worry, Sunny and Goldie - I have a feeling your luck is going to change soon. 

He bows and walks out the door.

Marigold:  I can't believe it - the man from my dream!  Who is he?  Where did he come from?   Did you catch his name?



Sunflower:  Did that man just wink at us?  Sunny.  I like that name.  Sunflower Flowers is a bit redundant-sounding, don't you think?  I never had a nickname before.  Henceforth, I shall be known as Sunny!
Marigold:  Well, "Sunny",  I guess we'd better go check out our new home.  Living at the Free Shelter at our age.
Sunflower:  I don't care.  It's better than being a servant to those meanies at home.  Come on, Goldie.  Let's go see our new place.


 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #58 on: June 05, 2011, 10:38:06 AM »
I wonder what Mr. Payne is up to now.

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« Reply #59 on: June 05, 2011, 12:03:42 PM »
Oh Mr.Payne, you work so hard to be a good person.

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« Reply #60 on: June 05, 2011, 01:03:34 PM »
Liking the nicknames Schip. Nice update.
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« Reply #61 on: June 05, 2011, 04:33:18 PM »
Chapter Eight

Mr Payne has errands.

First he goes to the Spa where he gives the receptionist a sheaf of bills and a piece of paper with an address written on it.



His next stop is the Salon.  Again a sum of money changes hands.



Next on the list, a construction site.



Mr Payne:  Are you sure it will be ready on time?  It's quite urgent, you know.
Foreman:  No problem.  I've got the best crew in town.  It'll be ready.   Don't worry about the mess, it'll be all cleaned up.  That's the apprentice's job.



Mr Payne:  Make sure you get the plants right.
Foreman:  I got it.  Want to stay and have a coffee with the crew?
Mr Payne:  I wish I could, but there's one more errand I need to do.  Confound the fellow!  I don't know how I'm supposed to find somebody who never answers his phone!
Foreman:  Maybe he don't want to be found.
Mr Payne:  Oh, I'll find him.  Count on it.  And when I do ...
Foreman:  Don't think I'd want to be in his shoes, whoever he is!

Mr Payne goes off to track down whoever it is he's looking for.  Meantime, Marigold and Sunflower dutifully go back to the "house" to check for mail.  By the way, the limousine just happened to be passing.  It definitely has nothing to do with our girls.



Sunflower:  We got mail!
Marigold:  Don't tell me.  More bills.  Do you think they'll repossess one of the urinals?
Sunflower:  It's not bills.  It's a letter. [reading] "The Sunset Valley Chamber of Commerce is pleased to welcome you to our friendly community.  To welcome you to our town, we enclose vouchers for complimentary treatments at the Spa and Salon.  We hope you enjoy the services provided by these fine businesses.  Thank you for choosing Sunset Valley."
Marigold:  Really?  Well, isn't that nice of them!  My, what a friendly town.
Sunflower:  Let's go now!

But before they can leave the phone rings.  It's Cornelia, from the Consignment Store.  She says:  A donor just brought in several bags of clothes that have hardly been worn.  They're all in your sizes.  We don't have room to store everything, so if you want any of these clothes you need to come over right away or I'll have to throw them out.  You can have anything you want, no charge.

Marigold and Sunflower hurry over to the Consignment Store.  The clothes look brand new.  They both pick out several outfits.  Then they go to the Spa, and finally to the Salon for a cut and colour.  By the end of the day they both feel and look much better.

Marigold's new look:



I laughed out loud when I saw Sunflower reacting to her new look in the mirror:


 
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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #62 on: June 05, 2011, 06:30:20 PM »
Mr. Payne sure is skilled.

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Re: The Flowers waiting for Grim
« Reply #63 on: June 06, 2011, 11:17:15 AM »
Sunny didn't have glasses before did she? Liking the looks anyway
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« Reply #64 on: June 06, 2011, 12:05:44 PM »
Sunny didn't have glasses before did she? Liking the looks anyway

No, she didn't.  Either she started needing glasses as she got older or she just liked the look of the new Generations glasses.   ;)  Thanks for the comment, Chopsticks.
 
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« Reply #65 on: June 06, 2011, 12:20:48 PM »
Chapter Nine

Living at the Fire Station isn't so bad.  Marigold and Sunflower soon get the hang of using the poles.



They set out to explore their new town.  Some might say the girls are a bit old to play on a teeter-totter, but they're having fun.



Every time Sunflower meets a new man she wants to kiss him.  Of course, she's never had any romance in her life, so it's probably natural for her to want to have this experience before Grim returns for her.  But the topic she chooses to talk about isn't to everyone's taste.



They are careful to check the mailbox every day.  Wednesday morning a letter arrives.



Marigold:  It's from "The Payne and Fears Law Office, acting on behalf of the Sunset Valley Chamber of Commerce."
Sunflower:  A law office!  Oh no!  They made a mistake sending us those spa vouchers and now they want them back!
Marigold:  No, it's not that.  Listen:  [she reads] "Sunset Valley is committed to providing the best possible education for its young people.  As you are aware, we have recently opened a number of new schools.  We are looking for someone to manage and run our newest educational facility.  We wish to hire you to operate Sunset Valley's Finishing School.  The building is ready for you to move in and decorate according to your requirements.  When you are ready to open please place an announcement in the newspaper so prospective students may apply.  We suggest naming the school The Flowers Finishing School.  We are in the process of retaining an assistant for you.  Your assistant should arrive in the next day or two.  Thank you for helping with this important educational project."  It's signed "Mr Payne."  Oh, and there's a ps:  "Don't mind the rabbits.  They're harmless."
Sunflower:  Is this a joke?  What do we know about running a finishing school?  We should be attending a finishing school, not running one!
Marigold:  It's the man we met at the Consignment store, the one from my dream.  He seems to think we can do this.  Probably our assistant will be a teacher, a nice middle-aged woman who will know what to do.
Sunflower:  It would be so nice to have a real kitchen again, instead of living on cereal at the Fire Station.
Marigold:  Look, let's try it.  What's the worst thing that can happen?  They'll fire us and kick us out and we'll be back to living at the Fire Station.  What do we have to lose?

And so they embark on a new adventure.



The new house is big and mostly empty.



But the bathroom is quite spiffy, with the new Gheez pattern on the wall.



 
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« Reply #66 on: June 06, 2011, 01:17:14 PM »
Three cheers for the brave Goldie and Sunny! I love their clothes, house, personality, and, of course, Mr. Payne. I just can't describe how I admire this story - bravo! :D
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« Reply #67 on: June 06, 2011, 05:13:12 PM »
Thanks very much, Chronic.  Coming from someone with your writing talent, that comment means a lot.
 
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« Reply #68 on: June 07, 2011, 04:23:40 AM »
Aww, thanks so much, Schip! :)
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« Reply #69 on: June 07, 2011, 10:04:18 AM »
Chapter Ten

On a sunny summer day, a group of friends enjoy a picnic lunch in the park.



All too soon it's time to return to work.



Mr Payne:  There you are!  Don't you ever answer your phone?  Put down that chainsaw, I need to talk to you.



Sculptor:  To answer your question, no, I don't answer the phone.  I see no reason to waste my time on idle chatter.
Mr Payne:  Wasting time never bothered you before, Leo.  You're avoiding someone, I can tell.  Who is she and what did you do to her?  Oh, never mind, I've heard it all before.  I've had quite a time tracking you down.  When did you leave your job at the bar?
Leo:  Oh, that was ages ago.  That gig got old real fast.  It was time to move on.
Mr Payne looks around at all the sculptures and says:  You've been busy, I see.
Leo:  Oh, yeah.  My brilliant idea - immortalizing the fine citizens of Sunset Valley.  But I tell you, some of them don't deserve to be immortalized!  Would you believe that Vita Alto - she actually complained that my sculpture didn't do her justice.  Looked in the mirror lately, Vita?  Or did the last one shatter when you came near it?
Mr Payne:  Diplomacy was never your strong suit.
Leo grins broadly:  You know me too well, old man!  Yeah, I was rebellious long before it became fashionable.  But I doubt it was a burning desire to see my handsome face that led you to track me all over the known Sim universe.  You want something.  Out with it!
Mr Payne:  I have a job for you -
Leo:  No!  Absolutely not!  No way!



Mr Payne:  Just listen.  There are these two old ladies, in the sunset of their life.  They've had a raw deal - abused, unloved, old, poor -
Leo:  My heart bleeds. 
Mr Payne:  You're bone idle, selfish -
Leo:  - and totally incorrigible.  That's me, alright.
Mr Payne:  Do I have to remind you of all you owe me? 
Leo:  You believe in hitting below the belt, don't you?  Oh, all right.  To tell the truth, I'm getting tired of living on hot dogs.  I was thinking the other day it's about time to move on.



He continues:  Somehow I never saw myself as babysitter to a couple of frail old biddies.  I don't suppose you could find a couple of young damsels in distress for me to help?
Mr Payne:  They're not frail.  Just beaten down by life.  You know what that's like.
Leo:  ... yeah.  So you want me to be nice to them -
Mr Payne:  No.
Leo:  No?
Mr Payne:  They don't need to be patronized or treated with kid gloves.  They need to learn their own strength.  You're the person that can help them find themselves.  I want you to be your usual cheeky, mouthy, obnoxious self.
Leo:  Gee, you really do like me.
Mr Payne:  I understand one of them is a very good cook.  And tell the truth, aren't you getting tired of sleeping on a park bench?



Leo:  Why is it so hard to say no to you?  Okay, you've got your "volunteer."
Mr Payne:  One more thing.  Neither of them has any happiness points to speak of, so you'll have to use some of yours to get the No Bills reward. 
Leo:  Yes, master.  Anything else, master?
Mr Payne:  Thank you.  Oh, and this is for you.



Leo:  A present?  For little ol' me?  What is it?
Mr Payne:  Open it and see. 


 
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« Reply #70 on: June 07, 2011, 10:28:58 AM »
Nice to meet you, Leo. I hope you can help Sunny and Goldie! :D Well done Mr. Payne, and awesome update, Schip!
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« Reply #71 on: June 07, 2011, 10:39:31 AM »
Why does the present remind me of farfetch'd? (signature move: exploding present). Love the update.
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« Reply #72 on: June 07, 2011, 11:07:13 AM »
Awww, I want a Mr Payne in RL so I can get presents like that!

Nice to meet you Leo, treat those two ladies well.
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« Reply #73 on: June 07, 2011, 11:16:36 AM »
Awww, I want a Mr Payne in RL so I can get presents like that!

Which present are you referring to - the house or Leo?   ;)

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« Reply #74 on: June 07, 2011, 11:52:26 AM »
Oops, I assumed the fancy bike was the gift from Mr Payne to Leo. My bad I guess.
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