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Nadia's Escape: FINISHED!
« on: March 10, 2013, 09:14:25 PM »
(Please note, My posting will be a little eratic. I have the absent-minded trait, but promise to tell you if I abandon this, which hopefully won't happen)

Hello, I am Nadia Sheffield. Charmed to meet you.


I am from Moonlight Falls, But I despise supernaturals, especially the fairies. I am rather proper, and I suppose stuck in my ways. But I always curtsy, nothing wrong with that. Everyone at school called me a snob, and that hurt, a lot. Suppose I'm a bit overemotional, but I'm still charismatic.

Nadia, that is enough, I'm going to talk.
She's a strong woman plus flamboyancy of 13. Can't deny that in the slightest, she hates supernaturals, so she left Moonlight Falls and settled in Appaloosa Plains. She forgot that supernaturals follow watchers like lost puppies.

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #1 on: March 10, 2013, 10:28:19 PM »
This is going to be interesting, since you love Fairies, Swirl-Girl.  I'll be reading.  :D



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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #2 on: March 10, 2013, 10:57:03 PM »
Thanks, I'm hoping for the first update to be tomorrow!

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Re: Nadia's Escape:Welcome To My Home Chapt. 1
« Reply #3 on: March 11, 2013, 05:06:48 PM »
Welcome To My Home

Good to see you again, Nadia Sheffield speaking. Welcome to my home



You may be wondering, why have I chosen Appaloosa Plains over Sunset Valley? The answer is this:



Why Agnes, why! You sounded like we could be great friends, but then you joined the fae! Those dastardly fiends!

Worst of all that disgusting chain "Varg's Tavern," made it's way into this beautiful small town.



Plus side to this whole mess is the whack a gnome game! Or should I say, whack a fairy!



Off that dramatic topic, I decided to get into the local feel and adopted a beautiful horse whom I christened Nerrissa.



Here are her training fields,



I'm truly getting comfortable in the small town life.



(Oooooooh, I'm a writing extraordinaire! See, foreshadowing!)

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« Reply #4 on: March 11, 2013, 05:42:34 PM »
Nice house.  I can never make fountains to look so beautiful.  I delete Varg's Tavern from my towns and put in the Grind instead.  Nerrissa is gorgeous.

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #5 on: March 12, 2013, 04:16:33 PM »
Thank you! (psst. I used blueprints)
My trick for the fountains is to make an interesting shape and put in as many spouts as you can bear. I love the sound they make! I don't have LN anymore, but I, personally, love Varg's Tavern.  and that was actually the first time I've customized a coat. I'm quite proud! A little mayhem happens next, I'll just say that the moon went a little, loony.

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Re: Nadia's Escape: Ahhh! Full moon.
« Reply #6 on: March 12, 2013, 04:51:04 PM »
Ahhh! Full Moon

"Do I have to speak? Today was so cruddy!"

Okay, the ever omnipotent Watcher will do it for you.

First I sent her to a quaint little park that had mysteriously cropped up (I built it)



She was having fun, and maybe even letting her guard down a bit,



Befriending some pets. "They can't become fairies." What about unicorns? "That was a dog!" you know, I just like to make fun of you.
She then stole a hot dog and settled down to chow down. "I am not klepto, like some of your sims." What do you mean? "You know who I mean!"



Then the sun set and the full moon rose...
When the zombie appeared she was ready to jump on the table. "It was just a reflex!" I thought I was narrating. Weren't the night's events to traumatic to talk about? "..." Thought so.



So she excused herself and left as soon as would be polite, so she wouldn't embarrass herself anymore.



When she got home she found herself confronted with a strange package.



She knocked on the front and was met by a strange beast.


"Horrible disgusting pile of bones!"

She primped a bit to calm herself down,



And nestled in for bed.



When something strange appeared in her lawn...
"No! don't show that photo, I am indecent!" Quiet! You ruined the mood!



But this zombie didn't look to real. Despite it's insisting that it wanted her *BRAAAAAAAAAAINNNNS!!!!!* she just mocked the poor thing.



(Please reply, I would love any constructive criticism you have!)

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« Reply #7 on: March 13, 2013, 06:50:06 AM »
Those silly zombies! ;D I enjoy your story a lot. :)

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #8 on: March 13, 2013, 07:09:15 AM »
I'm enjoying Nadia's strangely anti-fairy focus.  However, I'm glad to see that she's biased against all supernaturals.  Equal opportunity hatred is the fair way to go :=)
At any rate, perhaps it would be an interesting twist if she were to "accidentally" ingest a potion which made her into a supernatural and then had to do some type of "quest" to find an elixir to cure her?  Maybe a romantic interest who ends up turning out to be supernatural?  Does Nadia have a job?  If not, what if she seeks employment only to have a co-worker or boss who is supernatural?  If you have the university expansion, is it possible for her to use some spray paint to deface the supernatural gnome tower thing that I can never remember the actual name of? 
Just random ideas for you.  I like the interaction between you and Nadia as co-storytellers. 

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« Reply #9 on: March 13, 2013, 07:20:07 AM »
Oh Bonehilda. Why oh why are you so creepy? Oh yeah, your a skeleton!

Those zombies made me laugh! I loved the expressions on their faces.
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« Reply #10 on: March 13, 2013, 10:59:53 AM »
Gah, it's Bony!!! (I love Bony, but my nerotic sims don't. And I love nerotic sims more then Bony.)
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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #11 on: March 13, 2013, 05:19:55 PM »
Thanks for the feedback guys! Yeah she hates em all, the fairies are the worst. So devious! And they pretend to be sweet and nice! No, she hasn't got a job. She is rich, but that story is to be elaborated on.
sorry to disappoint but I may not update today, I haven't been playing enough ;D.

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #12 on: March 13, 2013, 10:13:58 PM »
You're forgiven for not updating.  After all, you've been too distracted commenting on my story :=)  Gotta love being part of the gang.  We have a gang now.  That's new  :=)
Thanks for wanting to deliver your best rather than just updating to update.  You so totally rock, Squirt!

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« Reply #13 on: March 14, 2013, 05:33:38 PM »
You're forgiven for not updating.  After all, you've been too distracted commenting on my story :=)  Gotta love being part of the gang.  We have a gang now.  That's new  :=)
Thanks for wanting to deliver your best rather than just updating to update.  You so totally rock, Squirt!

Yeah I think there is a gang of people who do comment on each other's stories.  :D  I hope we provide encouragement.  I know there is a rule about frivalous posts, but if I ever write a story, I hope I would see the 'usual gang' commenting. 

I'm enjoying the story but my computer doesn't render those dark night time screenshots too well, Swirl-Girl. 

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #14 on: March 14, 2013, 06:01:21 PM »
Hmmmm. Squirt. I think I like it.
I also like seeing your replies, because this is my first story, and I am really nervous.
Sorry about the night time one, I'll put in lighting outdoors, just one more update of them though!

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Re: Nadia's Escape: The Next 2 Days Chapt. 3
« Reply #15 on: March 14, 2013, 06:23:22 PM »
The Next 2 Days

Nerrissa and I are so excited for the race tonight! We've been practicing a lot. and I feel very ready.



We've even been practicing backwards, but it didn't work to well.


How're you doing up there?

Zombies came this night! Real ones!



I can tell, look at those hands, terrifying.



"Lemme just say something Nadia," No, I'm speaking! "Well, I am now. Look at her! I am scared for when she gets her midlife crisis." Mid life crisis? I'm not aging. "That's what they all say..."



"She decided to wear her athletic outfit for once while training." Hey, Hey, Hey! I'm talking now! "Hey is for horses."
Yeah, and I have a horse. "That wasn't very polite." Sorry.



I don't know if Nerrissa is okay, does she have to get checked out? "No, its fine, I've done this before." No, you haven't.



I decide to check out the elixir shop, lets just say that I'm never seeing that place again!


Wallowing in her self misery.


Happy Pi day! (March 14th)

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #16 on: March 14, 2013, 09:18:39 PM »
And a happy Pi Day to you, Squirt!
I can't help but wonder what's running through Nerrissa's mind throughout all of this.  Mayhaps this race we hear about could feature some of her thoughts?  Of course, it's also possible I simply have seen too many cartoons with talking animals...
Regardless, nice update.  Thanks for sharing :=)

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« Reply #17 on: March 14, 2013, 11:18:48 PM »
Nice update.  I had to laugh at the backward mount on Nerrissa.  That happens even to the most skilled of riders.  EA definitely has a sense of humour.  And happy Pi Day to those not on my side of the world.  To those who are, "Beware the Ides of March"  :P
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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #18 on: March 15, 2013, 04:25:41 PM »
Thank you everyone. Maybe I'll have an extra special episode from Nerrissa's view, Those two are quite the team. The way I see it is that Nerrissa is grounded and kind, While Nadia is polite, flighty, and heavy. If that makes sense.

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Re: Nadia's Escape:APWW
« Reply #19 on: March 15, 2013, 04:50:31 PM »
APWW

Now Nadia you tell them, "Why!" Because it is your fault. "Fine. Sorry. Hey uhh, readers? You know that race? Yeah, I forgot about it. Sorry." See? Not too hard. Now, I'll be narrating today. Okay?

Now, Nadia signed up for the APWW (Appaloosa Plains Welcome Wagon). And her first assignment weren't exactly, well you'll see.



She was told that it was 3 roommates, fresh out of college, and to welcome them very kindly, for Appaloosa Plains was trying to work on their diversity. Nadia assumed they were from Shang Sim La, or Al Simhara.

"There was a fairy! Appaloosa Civic let a fairy in!" Now Nadia. Yes she was a fairy.



And when she stepped in a ghost grabbed her, but she was able to walk right through him- "Not that I liked it." Nadia, you shouldn't interrupt me, I can do horrible things to you. "Not that you will. Sorry,"



And while she was there, the vamp decided to become a zombie. "The nerve of some people, ah, things!"



"And, I was cursed by the fairy!" Calm down, she just threw some fairy dust on you because she knew you were a little, nervous. "And it was terribly rude of her."



Nadia, I think you need to work on your manners. They've deteriorated significantly. "It's those zombies that come every night. Now I have to strain to remember to do things that were formally second nature."

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« Reply #20 on: March 15, 2013, 05:18:35 PM »
Nice twist with the surprise roommates!  I like the balance you've created between erratic and irrational Nadia and down to earth Nerrissa.  It will be interesting to see how the personalities of the supernatural trio add to that.

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #21 on: March 16, 2013, 08:42:49 AM »
Thanks. Right now I feel that Nadia is getting a little hysterical, what with the zombies, and now these creatures invading her utopia.

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« Reply #22 on: March 20, 2013, 02:56:21 AM »
Hmmm, looks like she was getting a bit friendly with that ghost! I hope that progresses. He looks cute!

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« Reply #23 on: March 21, 2013, 07:37:34 PM »
Wait, where's the references? I'm not picking em up, is it in later posts maybe?

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Re: Nadia's Escape
« Reply #24 on: March 21, 2013, 08:27:23 PM »
Poor Nadia! She needs to petition her Watcher to do something about the Supernaturals.
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