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Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story FINISHED!
« on: April 26, 2013, 07:14:08 AM »
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Distance Divided by Time- This is My Story

I have a good life. It's the 1960's, and life is as good as its gonna get.
I like Aaron, we see eye to eye. We both agree on the important stuff, science, faith, and "politics".



I have built a time machine. I am very proud and intend to go into the future and ensure a good life for Aaron and I.



Well, welcome to 2013.
It is really



really,



really different.



So different...

I did as any other would do, I went to the Graveyard to scope out who moved along.



I found Aaron's grave, and I wept. It was this crushing, claustrophobic feeling. Seeing proof that he does die. There, carved in stone.



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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #1 on: April 26, 2013, 08:54:57 AM »
The question that appear in my mind is Aaron died because of what? Nice story, Squirt. I'll reading this to see how this story will end.
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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #2 on: April 26, 2013, 11:52:48 AM »
Good start. I'd like to have more background story, though, goes a little fast for me :)

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #3 on: April 26, 2013, 12:21:56 PM »
Wait -- the 60's aren't the past! Okay, I guess to some people that was a long time ago. I like the flip-flops and the lava lamps and the madras plaid shirt.
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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #4 on: April 26, 2013, 03:06:22 PM »
The question that appear in my mind is Aaron died because of what? Nice story, Squirt. I'll reading this to see how this story will end.
Good point, Eld.  If we only umped ahead about 50 years, and they were maybe 20ish-30ish, he'd only be 70 or 80...

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #5 on: April 27, 2013, 04:42:31 AM »
The question that appear in my mind is Aaron died because of what? Nice story, Squirt. I'll reading this to see how this story will end.
Good point, Eld.  If we only umped ahead about 50 years, and they were maybe 20ish-30ish, he'd only be 70 or 80...
Don't worry, I cover Aaron's death in the next chapter. Also note, he doesn't look any older, nor did he die from old age. (facepalm, at this point you had not seen Aaron's ghost, sorry.
Good start. I'd like to have more background story, though, goes a little fast for me :)
I also purposely made the backstory rushed.
Wait -- the 60's aren't the past! Okay, I guess to some people that was a long time ago. I like the flip-flops and the lava lamps and the madras plaid shirt.
I'd put anything about 10 years ago into the past. Depends how you think about it. I thought it'd be appropriate, especially since my dad was born in 1965. Also, thanks! I never experienced the 60's myself, but didn't want to over do it or stereotype it, I went for more muted colors, except for the green. I went for a bit of a homemade look, almost like burlap. I also did it on how I see my mom at that age, because she is a self proclaimed hippie.

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #6 on: April 28, 2013, 06:53:45 PM »
"Move On"



As I recovered, I saw an incorporeal figure rise from the ground.
I felt like Atlas, slipping out from under the sky. A smile broke out on my face, a sight not often seen.



I tried to speak, but he cut me off.
"Please, don't make this harder then it has to be."



I was confused.
"What do you mean by that?"
"Well, I suppose that I mean, I've moved on."
"How did you die?" I ventured.
"After you left, there was a huge fire. The time machine was gone, and so were you. Everyone thought you had died. So I rioted. I told Death to get his money grubbing hands off of your spirit."
"And his reply?" I encouraged.
"He came and said, 'I do not have your lady,' and I insisted he did. He disappeared. But still I persisted. I tried again. he took my spirit to prove to me that he did not have you." He took a deep breath and continued, " I've moved on. I tired of fighting, and I rested. I cannot be with you. Please, move on."
He melted into the ground.



I fell backwards on my butt.
"I need a minute," I muttered to nothing.



I went "home" to sleep. I'm not sure why I didn't hop into my time-machine and go back to before Aaron died. I suppose I knew that was not how it is supposed to happen. Doesn't matter now, the zombies busted it.
As I slept, I dreamed of "moving on," as Aaron had put it.

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #7 on: April 28, 2013, 07:00:36 PM »
Hmm...wondering if there's some deeper Grim-oriented subplot going on here.  Zombies breaking the machine, a ghost telling her to move on...lots of undead happening...

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« Reply #8 on: April 28, 2013, 07:09:57 PM »
Hmmm. This is definitely going to lead to another story. ;)

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #9 on: April 28, 2013, 08:56:29 PM »
I never had that kind type of death. What it is again? Ranting-related thing?

Oooh, more zombies! Nadia should see this, Squirt! There one more zombie that she can look for here! She can be a potential friend!
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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #10 on: April 29, 2013, 04:11:49 PM »
Yeah, death by ranting. I don't have UL but it was still fitting.

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #11 on: May 01, 2013, 05:06:15 PM »
I'm Trying, It's Not Easy
Being Green

Since I can't return, and it's obvious that I didn't. I went to meet people. This man introduced himself as "Mr. SuperDesirableSuperSpouseBachelorDude" Or something ridiculous like that. I was not entertained. He gave up and said he was Christopher Steel.
"Nice to meet you Chrissy,"
"Uhh, it's Christopher Steel,"
"Okay, Chrissy,"



Chrissy and I really hit it off.



Like, REALLY hit it off. I feel guilty now. Why Aaron! Why can't I join you?



I spent the night in Chrissy's bed. Nothing under the sheets! Just a bit of cuddling.

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Re: Distance Divided by Time: This is My Story
« Reply #12 on: May 01, 2013, 08:51:19 PM »
Oooh, I see what are you doing there... :P

I just can't guess what will happening from now on. I guess that I will waiting for the next incoming chapter, Squirt  ;)
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« Reply #13 on: May 02, 2013, 07:30:48 AM »
I guess you will. ;)

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« Reply #14 on: May 03, 2013, 04:05:00 PM »
I Don't Know Anymore

I have no Idea what I'm even doing now.

In the morning, I don't know. I blacked out for a second. Or something. But I found myself on one knee, and Chrissy was admiring a ring. Aaron and I never felt the need for the Government to identify our relationship. Why do I feel it now?



I came back to the time machine after work. Guess who showed up? I was upset with Aaron, I felt terrible, I cheated on him, and now I'm engaged. I'm disappointed to say that I got mad at him.



But Aaron calmed me down. He brought me back to earth, and reminded me that I love Chris. I've changed. The world has changed. I just feel like I need a refresher.



I sat down to mull it over and convince myself. You can do this. Society has moved along without you, you need to remind it that you are still kicking!


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