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That was a funny moment when Agnes comment about America current state. I hope America will have her own house soon. Just looking at the bed only wanna make me cry. Of course that Cornelia is unhappy, Agnes just sold her house and car to a totally stranger, but at least that she has a goodnight sleep. It’s also fun to see more of one different character view in your story. I love the screenshot where I can see Gus Hart in your story! Well, I guess that will be worked out somehow. Poor, Chris!
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That was a nice thought and conversation between Agnes and Cornelia. Harvesting plant in Gobias house is a nice idea also because he has some interesting plant there. I just wonder about that myself, how can be a puppy tugged something like THAT big. Nice, other townies! Thornton Wolff! I just wonder that why you didn’t build house and I just found out why, you want to make this story is as realistic as possible. You’re pretty clever writer!
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Ah, full of townies face in the screenshot! You don’t know about how happy I am pointing that I knew that person. You played out their traits nicely. The way that you’re remodeled the Old Pier Beach Park is quite amazing. I love how it looks! It has country feel and you’re a pretty good builder yourself. I just wonder how people can build the house so good, so yeah I kinda envy them as well as you

Well, happy birthday America!
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That was another funny moment there, seeing America half-naked! It’s nice to see that you cherished them. Well, usually from story I read a few of them didn’t really care about helper birthday and just let them alone like that. It’s really a nice touch to the story and I really love to see that. It’s nice makeover to both Agnes and Chris, they’re looks good with their new looks. Ahh, who doesn’t love Mortimer Goth?

Sandi French, hmmm… I ever seen her once in my game, she looks so absorbed with her cake. For having the same clothes that they wear that would be a worst thing ever happen in the party. That was very detail how you put missing Sim who didn’t attend the party. It’s a nice touch, indeed.
Agnes is unhappy, well so many things happened to her life unexpectedly and it’s all America fault. She just missed her old home, her old car and everything

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That is really nice touch for the screenshots for explaining each moment that happens step by step. Haha… Poor Agnes, but at least that she had something to do. I just hope that she will found her love at least. I love an edited version of your screenshot for such special moment. That adds more feel.
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Looking at the beginning what a nice way to describe something. The dog has two different eyes color! Is that even possible? What a nice way to put thought bubble icon with different Sim pose and facial expression in one Screenshot. I think this is… so original.
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“I am not into a cult” thing that Cornelia and Agnes talking about have been amused me for quite awhile, haha and the name “Abomination” just crack me up! Well, welcome to the world Kara! You add so many details to the story; I’m enjoying every bit of it. You seem having fun writing this as this is your personal diary. And the decoration is just looks good, you’re got skill and yet here I am just wondering again when I can be a good builder and decorator. It’s good to see that everyone loves Kara

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What a best birthday gift for Agnes! You capture the screenshots really well! This chapter is pretty short compared to the rest, but it has lot of good screenshot and I enjoy every bit of it

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I can see another newcomer here. But, having Mortimer here never dull moment anyway! Let’s see that was Holly Alto and Sandi French, am I right? I can’t recognize the elders thought. Interesting when you Goth and French dancing together, now my question is: Where’s Bella? Haha, probably she was taken away by alien!
Or… That just Thorntorn excuse for playing games *grin*
What is “Maerka” mean? Is that word has any meaning of something? Sound fishy to me.
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The line that Kara transformed into real girl makes me laugh. So what do you think about Kara all this time, America?
You’re very good at capturing moments! The screenshots about Kara, Eldritch and a Sophie was pretty good; it looks like a real photo. Oh, RIP Gus Hart even that I only play you once and edit you in CAS after that.
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Agnes with VJ…? That was interesting pair. Too bad that she become Elder already, if not she can have his child! I knew that woman that was Victoria Andrews in the bottom right in Eldritch & Agnes screenshot! Seeing Agnes in your story, she seems have a lot of fun. Well, at least she is enjoying her life!
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Another nice building and decoration! I really loved how you put that together! It’s nice to see some humor here. Garden shed? Interesting way to describe the problem! I have ever seen that glitch (Nick Alto) in my game, he looks like bring something but actually don’t and that was strange.
Look what you write here about Kara and America discussion, it’s like parent-children real conversation. Well, kinda remind me of my Mum. Especially when I look at “bad behavior won't get her what she wants, at some point.”

That was a nice way what Chris say. I believe that America was evil as she pick her target, but it seems living together with them has soften her heart.
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That was an amazing house. Wow. Just. Wow. Hey! I know that man in the library who helping Kara doing her homework! That’s Beau Andrews! Aww, goodbye Sophie! It ‘s always sad to see the death part, but life must go on, right? Oh, boy I sense some trouble between Kara and America. I hope that will not last long.
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It’s very well written like other chapters. I can’t say much but I just wonder do you have some experience with children and these situations? How to put it? You seem know how to tell such a situation with right words. I love to see how America changes from her old self and develop more into motherly figure and not only that I can see everybody around growing too.