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The Pharoah Dynasty - COMPLETE!
« on: April 18, 2012, 05:00:00 PM »
This is my third serious attempt at the Immortals challenge, but my first time writing it.  My last two files glitched hardcore, so hopefully 3rd time's the charm!  Any and all comments, hints, and tips are appreciated, we'll see how it goes!


The Immortals
1. Menes Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Culinary Librarian
Career - Culinary
Supermax Skill - Cooking
Building/Property - Diner/Willow Creek
3 LTR - Legendary Host, Haggler, Bookshop Bargainer
6 Best Friends - Ruby Pharoah, Chen Hong, Tanisha Montalvo, Yvette Grisby, Odin Crosby, Shayna Dodson
6 Black Ops - Fresh Fish, Tough Negotiating, On-the-Clock Dinner Date, A Plumber and Fisherman, Learn a Recipe, Excellent Produce (or...whatever it's called)
Portraits - Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Natural Cook, Charismatic, Angler, Green Thumb, Bookworm

2. Tut Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Swimming in Cash
Career - Painter
Supermax Skill - Painting
Building/Property - Bookstore/Riverview Hatchery
3 LTR - Extra Creative, Artisan Crafter, No Bills Ever
6 Best Friends - Menes Pharoah, Elena Montalvo, Shari Pharoah, Jess Potter, Jonas McManus, Brandt Sterling
6 Black Ops - Best Food in Town, Save the Herding, Broadway Cameo, Business Model, An Old Ruse, Fresco Fest
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Artistic, Friendly, Savvy Sculpter, Excitable, Photographer's Eye

3. Hatshepsut Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Physical Perfection
Career - Professional Sports
Supermax Skill - Athletic
Building/Property - Grocery Store/Cemetary
3 LTR - Food Replicator, Body Sculptor, ExtraordinAIRe-Inator
6 Best Friends - Tut Pharoah, Bobo Pharoah, Dwight Cowart, Timothy Grantham, Jameel Shaffer, Wade Grantham
6 Black Ops - Jog Everywhere, Celebrity Body, At the Health Seminar, Agent Training, Bounce the Crowd, The Right Way to Riot
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Athletic, Disciplined, Brave, Daredevil, Lucky

4. Ramses Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Monster Maker
Career - Inventing
Supermax Skill - Handiness
Building/Property - Performance Park/Flying V's Coffeehouse
3 LTR - Effecient Inventor, Suave Seller, Fireproof Homestead
6 Best Friends - Hatshepsut Pharoah, Christen Pharoah, Stacey Pharoah, Bree Pharoah, Danita Pharoah, Corinna House
6 Black Ops - When Dreams Come True, Scrap for Toys?, Master Invention, Hygienation Hijinks, A Task About Time, Bring Back the Jams
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Eccentric, Insane, Lucky, Handy, Born Salesman

5. Ahkenaten Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Chess Legend
Career - Medical
Supermax Skill - Logic
Building/Property - Little Corsican Bistro/River Front Swim Club
3 LTR - Teleportation Pad, Moodlet Manager, Fast Metabolism
6 Best Friends - Jessa Pharoah, Ramses Pharoah, Tori Pharoah, Feisal Pharoah, Kara Gulley, Shante Spain
6 Black Ops - It Takes Heart, Hospital Mystery, You Don't Really Need It, Fixing the Celestial Slump, Riddle Away, Brain Trust
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Genius, Hates the Outdoors, Friendly, Bookworm, Workaholic

6. Seti Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - CEO of a Mega-Corporation
Career - Business
Supermax Skill - Nectarology
Building/Property - Outstanding Citizen Warehouse/Landgraab Sell 'n Swap
3 LTR - Dusty Old Lamp, Professional Slacker, Map to the Stars
6 Best Friends - Ahkenaten Pharoah, Loretta Pharoah, Daniel Morgan, Catherine Aguilera, Jessie Knowles, Tanesha Pryor
6 Black Ops - Hospital Delivery, Oh and Bring Gifts, Better Photographs!, Spaaaah Marathon, Political Influence, Rhythm Robot
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Loves the Outdoors, Friendly, Perfectionist, Vegetarian, Rebellious

7. Cleopatra Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Super Popular
Career - Politics
Supermax Skill - Charisma
Building/Property - Sunflower Spa/Wright Reading Room
3 LTR - Observant, Never Dull, Attractive
6 Best Friends - Seti Pharoah, Chet Summers, Zebulon Hardin, Trever Brinson, Tamra Bell, Keon Moreland
6 Black Ops - The Honor Roll, Scavenger Hunt: Butterfly Bonanza, Amateur Olympics, Better Mixology, Mixing and Clubbin', Drink Promotion
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Friendly, Brave, Party Animal, Charismatic, Social Butterfly

8. Ptolemy Pharoah - IMMORTAL
LTW - Professional Author
Career - Writing
Supermax Skill - Writing
Building/Property - Riverview Gym/Riverview Spa
3 LTR - Acclaimed Author, Complimentary Entertainment, Fertility Treatment
6 Best Friends - Cleopatra Pharoah, Spring Spiotto, Irma Grace, Miriam Meehan, Jana Braden, Jaron Spiotto
6 Black Ops - Pile of Permission Slips, Work/School Learning Project, The Boiler Room, The Gossip Column, Correcting Past Mistakes, Make-a-Dream
Portraits - Toddler, Child, Teen, Young Adult, Adult, Elder
Traits - Loner, Good, Bookworm, Great Kisser, Vegetarian

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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #1 on: April 18, 2012, 05:04:46 PM »
I look forward to seeing how this works out for you! I love the name of it! However...I love themey Dynasties.

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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #2 on: April 18, 2012, 08:18:46 PM »
Yay, thanks!

Pictures will come shortly, I promise.  Soon as I stop being lazy.


1.  Menes - Running From the Past

My name is Menes Pharoah, though I'm not sure why.  The people at the science facility have strange ways of operating, and I'm sure I wouldn't care about it all if they tried to explain themselves.  Parents?  I don't remember any parents, I don't think I have any, to be quite honest.  To be honest... I think I'm a clone.  It would explain a lot, like these flashbacks I keep having.  Flashbacks of families long gone, a little girl named Nefer and a beautiful, loving woman named Jamie.  I could do without these dreams, and the fact that there's a woman named Jamie living in the Valley only makes things worse.

All I know is I grew up in the science facility, being trained for a single purpose.  I'm supposed to become immortal.  Well.  I am immortal, for a time.  If seven more generations follow suit, then I can finally die, and death, to me, would be a sweet release.  Would I be dooming the others in my family if I begin this?  I'm not sure I would care, I don't know any of them, and so far, none of them know me.  I wouldn't necessarily have to tell them about my plan, would I?  I wish I could have a normal life, but I know that's impossible.

I grew to hate the Valley, seeing the woman, Jamie, around town only made things worse, and when the scientists started suggesting I meet her and try to talk to her about these dreams I keep having, I couldn't do it.  Something told me it was wrong, and if I'd failed this before, if she even knew about it, I couldn't put her through it again.  I couldn't put myself through it again.  So, I did the only thing a young man could do.  I ran away.

There were a few places I could run to, but, ultimately, there was only one start.  It seemed several people were trying to lay low in this town, and I suppose I should follow suit.  And so, without any further questioning, I ran for Riverview.  It's a beautiful place to fish and garden, and the lot I managed to buy with my meager savings is huge, big enough to house the means to my end.  I don't have enough to build myself even a cottage yet, but the time will come when I can, hopefully it will be soon.

As soon as I looked all my land over, I headed into town and began a job at the local Bistro.  I love cooking, and the fact that I love to garden, and can cook with my produce, makes me even happier.  The fish I can catch out of the twin rivers can also be put toward my culinary skills, so who wouldn't be happy in this little town?  Hopefully I can keep mainly to myself, and hopefully no one will find out what my plans are.  I don't want to be sinister, but it's simply best they don't know.

As soon as I'd joined a job that would get me at least a little money, I went to the library in order to work on my skills.

First I read a cookbook, though I only needed a refresher course on it all, and then moved to a book about charisma.  While I read, many people began to pile into the building, so I decided to test my new-found skill.  I talked with a few people (I feel bad about not remembering their names, but the less I involve myself, the less it will hurt), until my eyes caught sight of a beautiful redhead by the name of Ruby.

We talked and talked and hit it off immediately, and if I wanted to eventually die, I knew I would have to find a wife.

Something about this woman intrigued me, and I couldn't stop thinking about her, even when I went to the local fire station to sleep, seeing as how I didn't have a bed.  The next day I went back to the library to read up on gardening, see where I might be able to buy a few seeds so I could start on my garden at home.  Fate has a sense of humor, I suppose, for Ruby was there once again.  We talked again for hours, until we both had to go to work.  Once again, I couldn't stop thinking about her, even when sleeping at the fire station yet again.

I wish I didn't have to do it, I wish I could just live out my life as a hermit, but if I want these dreams to stop, if I want to see the end, and possibly the people in the families I had before, I would need to open myself to the pain once again.  I decided I wanted to marry this woman, this Ruby.


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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #3 on: April 19, 2012, 11:11:45 AM »
Great start and very good writing! Looking forward to the pictures. :)

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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #4 on: April 21, 2012, 08:52:56 AM »
Looking forward to the next update!  :)

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« Reply #5 on: April 21, 2012, 09:22:57 PM »
Glad people are reading!  Finally got some pictures up, as you can see.  If you want to see anything specific, let me know!


2.  Menes - New Beginnings

I couldn't believe what I was about to do.  It was important for my end, but could I put someone else through it?  I would have to.  So I called Ruby over for a chat.

We talked for awhile, she really wasn't expecting anything much.  She had a big family, and she'd often said she wanted to get out of it somehow. It came up again, and as she looked out over the land I'd bought, she seemed to have a bit of a wistful glint in her eyes.  There were dreams there, there were a lot of things there, and while it hurt me to think of it, maybe I could help her.  It would hurt me in the end, but that... that didn't matter quite as much, did it?

So that was it, I proposed.

She was thrilled, as though she'd waited for this moment in the short time we'd known each other.  I was thrilled, for marrying her made it so my end was even nearer.  It wasn't the most important thing at this point, but it was a close second.

A little while later, after Ruby had calmed down, we decided to have a private wedding right then and there.  No time like the present, right?

Ruby didn't bring much money into our new family, but it was enough to make a two-room house.  Just one room for our bed and kitchen, and the other for a bathroom.  She agreed to sell her inexpensive car and guitar in order to buy us a few bits of furniture and an easel.  Ruby will be doing a lot of painting until... well... we have someone else who can.  When she's not painting, she'll be sculpting.

I was well on my way to the end, it was a long way off, but everything had to start somewhere.

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The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #6 on: April 21, 2012, 09:35:20 PM »
Very nice, fanofaband! A nice story to look forward to :)

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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #7 on: April 22, 2012, 12:48:49 AM »
My second generation is Teen and my first is Elder in-game, so I really need to pick up.  I'm... really bad at remembering to take pictures, so I apologize if I forget something.  Sad thing is, I'm pretty sure I'm already going to fail this dynasty, mer.  We'll see how it goes.


3.  Menes - The Second Generation

Ruby spent most of her days painting now, so she could start to paint portraits of everyone.

I spent my days fishing in the nearby river to try and add a little money to our meager funds.  Luckily it was easy enough to catch the ones in the river, sooner or later I would have to go to one of the ponds or the hatchery to get something bigger.

Not too much time had passed, and we were finally able to add another room to our tiny house, giving us a separate bedroom from the kitchen and living room.  Whenever the next generation was going to be born, we would have to find a way to add another room on, but at least that would be further away, at least I hoped so.

I was incredibly wrong.

3.1.  Ruby - Little Secrets

Menes had suprised me with his proposal!  I was so happy I had found someone I could grow old with in the future.  For the longest time I'd had dreams of running around town, breaking hearts for as long as I possibly could.  Menes had effectively stopped that as soon as I had laid eyes on him.  Now I just hoped we could make enough money to have a decent living.  My husband confided in me that he wanted to buy a few buildings or properties, to earn income, which made sense to me.

Something was missing though.  Between painting and sculpting, our little house seemed just... too big for us.  I wanted a baby, but I wasn't too sure what Menes would say.  I wasn't sure how he would take the news when I found out, but luckily, he was thrilled.  There was an odd look in his eyes, but wouldn't any expecting father be the same?

My belly kept getting bigger and bigger, and before we knew it, we rushed to the hospital, finally returning home with a wonderful baby boy.  Menes had simply smiled when I asked him what we should name our little boy, and he'd replied he wanted me to name him.  It had taken me awhile to find a suitable name for him, but it finally arrived.

Welcome to the world, Tut Pharoah!

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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #8 on: April 23, 2012, 12:27:25 AM »
I was hoping I wouldn't have to double post, but I'm much further along in my game than I am writing this.  My third generation just turned into a Toddler, so... yeah.


4.  Menes - Getting Older

Not long after Tut was born, both Ruby and I grew older on the same day.  It was kind of nice to share a birthday with my wife, but it was a bit bittersweet.

Ruby still paints and sculpts, and I've slowly been getting promotion after promotion.  In between working and caring for a newborn, I somehow managed to get a little gardening and fishing in, as well as cooking my wife and I's favorite dishes.

It didn't seem like it had been all that long before Tut grew up to a toddler.  We haven't been a real party family, so we had a quiet night with just the three of us.  Ruby got him out of his crib and held him for a bit before finally admitting he was growing older.

Tut takes after his mother, definitely.  He has the same face shape (already!), the same red hair and the same eyes as Ruby.  I was a little concerned when I discovered his favorite color, but I suppose I can get used to him wearing pink all the time.  Ruby and I both took turns teaching him a few skills before he would become a child.

We both took plenty of time playing with him while he was still little, and Ruby took particular interest in reading him a few books about painting.  He's already taken a liking to it, so we figured we would encourage him.

One day, while Tut was playing with his little bear, we noticed it was finally his birthday!  Poor boy, we'd been so caught up in playing, we had forgotten.  But he aged up in front of his new easel, which was probably a hint that he wanted more to do with it.

We also managed to add another room, finally, so Tut could have his own bedroom.

[author's note:  I'm horrible and didn't take very many Child pictures of Tut.  But he's a cutie, I like him better as Teen/Adult though.]


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Re: The Pharoah Dynasty
« Reply #9 on: April 23, 2012, 06:07:10 AM »
Congrats with all the birthdays! Nothing wrong with a boy wearing pink. ;)

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« Reply #10 on: April 23, 2012, 07:55:23 PM »
5.  Menes - The First Teenager?

Somehow I managed to get my last promotion at work.  I still garden and cook everyone's favorite foods.  Mine and Ruby's are easy enough, Autumn Salad and Pancakes, respectively.  Tut's was a little more difficult, as it's Shwarma and I can't find the recipe anywhere.  Since we still don't have enough money to travel [read-gen 2 isn't old enough], I decided to sit in front of the tv for several days until I learned it.  Finally!  Now Tut's as happy as he can be now there's a constant supply of his favorite meal in the brand new fridge the Bistro gave me with my last promotion.

Tut painted all the time whenever he wasn't at school or working on homework.  Time flew by, and before we knew it, Tut was growing up in front of his art easel.  Again.

Immediately he ran to the mirror and closet to fix his hair and clothes.  I... I'm worried about him...

He's a good looking guy though, have to give him that much.  Looks a lot like his mother, and I'll be happy to have a reminder of her for the following years to come.  I think.

Ruby instantly painted his new portrait, she's been working on her ice sculpting as well.  Hopefully she will become proficient enough they don't melt soon.  Once that happens, she can begin sculpting statues for us.

A few nights later, we got a nasty suprise visit.  A burglar tried to rob us!  Luckily we'd bought a burglar alarm a few days before, so it went off in time for the police to come and catch her, but still, it was a scare.

Tut kept painting and doing his homework, and he joined the after school Art Club and did rather well!  He brought home a few pieces and instantly sold them to earn a promotion.  Didn't I mention it?  Once he became a teenager he became a self-made Painter.  He's doing really well, most of his pieces are selling for around $1,000 right now.

Soon enough, prom came.

Tut was named Prom King, even though he got into a few fights.  He got a couple of pictures and a crown he put on his new wall shelf.

Time's running out though.  I'm not sure if I'll be able to make it through all of this.  Tut hasn't even met a girl he likes yet, which is important.  What am I to do?

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« Reply #11 on: April 24, 2012, 12:05:32 AM »
[I'm bored, bear with me, aha]


6.  Menes - Two Girls?

I've read back through all this and noticed I'm not as focused on my own death as I was in the beginning.  Is it because I've realized my family's happiness is more important?  Or is it because both Ruby and I became Elders on the same day?  That's right, we both become Elders.  Ruby was in the process of sculpting.

She wasn't too thrilled with the way she looked, so she insisted I get a few pictures after her home-made makeover.

Then it was my turn. I get Ruby's idea.  Not living the rest of my life with grey hair.

Tut made fun of me for awhile after I dragged out my old clothes and bought some hair dye.  Probably serves me right for being worried about him.  Though grey is still better than pink.

Speaking of (and because I'd been so worried about it earlier), Tut's been talking to a girl... [author's note - forget her name, I really need to start taking better notes].  He invited her over and she ended up spending the night.  They sat outside for a long time just watching the stars...

And then shared their first kiss...

Maybe I shouldn't have been spying on them.

Time was really flying by.  Tut had been on the honor roll for some time and had earned several more promotions in his job.  Then, yet again, he aged up while he painted.

And... yet again another makeover.  The boy still loves his pink.

[another note - I really like it, actually, I think it goes great with his hair and eye color]

A couple days earlier Tut had gotten an award from his art club, and now we were headed for his graduation.

He was chosen as Class Valedictorian and Most Likely to be Mediocre.  They have no idea what he's in for, do they?

He was so excited he tried to call up the girl he was interested in.  Only to find out she was still a teenager.  Our family didn't have much time [read - I'm too impatient], so he looked up another old classmate.

She came right over and they chatted for awhile.

Before I even knew what was happening (neither did Ruby, even though she was standing right there!), Tut dropped on one knee and proposed to her, before even introducing her to us!

To her credit, she accepted rather readily.  Reminds me of when I proposed to Ruby...

They decided to get married right then and there.  Ruby was still engrossed in her sculpting.

It's Tut's story now.  I'm almost finished with what I need to do, but now it's his turn to speak.  I just hope he doesn't hate me for what all of us have to do...

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« Reply #12 on: April 25, 2012, 05:29:52 PM »
I kinda wish more people would read this, it's nice to know when they do.  Oh well!


7.  Tut - Another Generation

My dad is a complete idiot.  Of course he knew I'd read this when the time came!  There's a lot more I wish I could say, but Dad told me 'no profanity'. fun.  Immortality?  Dad can't die?  This, I don't believe, it's just a matter of time.  But... I suppose I'll try for it, for his sake.  But I feel bad now that I've married Shari.  I've doomed her to death while I live on forever.  If I'd known that, I would have hermited myself away for the rest of my life.  That's the point though, I suppose...

Well, where do I start?  Dad left off with me proposing to Shari, even though I hadn't introduced her to my parents yet.  Who cares though?  I love that woman.  Sure, I'd hung around Elena [Montalvo] for awhile, but there wasn't too much there after awhile.  I was older than her too, and it was just creepy.  Shari and I graduation on the same day, and after I proposed, she readily accepted and moved right in.  You know, the more I think about it, the more I think she used to deliver our paper when I was younger...

As soon as she moved in, I let her get all new clothes, and comfy ones at that, since she likes hanging around the house a lot.

Isn't she the most beautiful woman you've ever seen?  She's a bit of a writer, so she was thrilled when she found out I'd discovered it and bought her a laptop to use.

Dad decided to take a trip to China for a few days now that I was out of school.  He picked up a few recipes, a few seeds, fished for awhile, and tried to get his Visa up enough to buy a vacation home.  Didn't work, and he came back a few days later.

Shari and I had been a little busy as well.  We were just married, of course, and, well, as all married couples do...

Of course, we didn't really expect much, but, yet again, surprise!

I kept painting and sculpting as much as I could, I was almost to the top of my painting career, and Shari wrote as much as she could while she was pregnant.  Soon enough our lifetime wishes were completed!  We had enough money in the bank to make me feel secure in the future, and Shari was making well over $5,000 a week with her royalties.  Life was good, wasn't it?

Much sooner than we expected, Shari went into labor while she was writing.

And soon gave birth to a beautiful baby girl she named Hatshepsut.

We decided to expand the house a little that night so we'd be more comfortable.  Everyone was exhausted, but we managed to get it done.


I'm not much of a builder in this game, but the way everything's turning out (updated pictures will come soon), I'm pretty proud.  I'm not the greatest, but I think it looks good at least.

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« Reply #13 on: April 25, 2012, 07:29:50 PM »
Fanofaband, I read it...and like...I just don't post all the time.

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« Reply #14 on: April 25, 2012, 08:07:55 PM »
Thanks for letting me know!  I get a little insecure sometimes.


8.  Tut - A Birthday, a Trip, and an Immortal

Time seems to go by way too fast now.  It seems like just yesterday Hati was born, but now she's set to grow up again.  I went and picked her up, giving my baby one last cuddle before she grew up and became mobile.

Isn't she adorable?  Somehow she didn't get Mom and I's red hair, or Shari's light brown.  Nope, she got Dad's black hair, which kind of makes me laugh.  Of course it would skip a generation, but I'm happy with Mom's red hair for me, at least it'll be something to remember her by.

Dad hung around for awhile to see how Hati had grown, and then decided to take another trip to China.  He really wants to get a vacation home there.  Something about my little girl makes him think we'll be going there a lot while she grows up.  I hope he's right, I can't wait to see what it's like there.

He went tomb-raiding and managed to find Pangu's Axe!

And, of course, had a little fun with it.  Sometimes he's not the dour old man he seems to be.  Sometimes he can actually have fun.  I know right?

With only a couple days left on his vacation, he managed to get his Visa for China to level 3!  That means we can buy a home there now, but he decided to wait until we could all look them over, a little more money wouldn't hurt either.

He fished the rest of the time, and he managed to catch quite a few fish.  Dad says he caught several Deathfish while he was there, but customs wouldn't let him bring them back home.  Weird...  It's not like we don't have them here or anything.

When Dad got back, he looked a little... different.  He told me in private that he'd finally managed to become the best cook in the world, and now he was ready for his true immortality.  Until all of this ends, of course.  I watched as he whipped up a batch of Ambrosia, and then sat down with him as he ate.

It's finally begun, I guess there's no real turning back now, huh?

After all the excitement, we decided to let Hati grow her hair out and get a few new clothes.

I'll say it again, my daughter is adorable.

I let Shari keep writing and I taught her everything she needed to know.  It will take Shari longer than I to reach the end of her profession.  She was sad she wouldn't be able to teach her everything, but she's her mother, they love each other very much.

Someone sent Hati a doll.  No one knows who this 'Aunt Bernice' is, but I suspect Shari's family.  Whatever the case, Hati loves little Bobo, and plays with him all the time.

Everything was going great in our household, everyone was happy, nothing was going wrong, if something managed to break, Mom would have it fixed in a heartbeat.  Yep, everything was great, until... well... tragedy struck.

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« Reply #15 on: April 25, 2012, 11:21:52 PM »
9.  Tut - Two Deaths and a Funeral

Like I said, something terrible happened.  Dad died.

We didn't think it was possible for him to die, we all thought he was immortal.  He ate the Ambrosia, and the scientists had told him...  Well, whatever happened, maybe Grim just got his information wrong.

Dad was prepared and whipped out a Death Flower in an instant, presenting it to Grim, who squealed and jumped around like a girl at the sight of it.

He started going on and on about which vase to put it in, and even stuck around to talk to Dad a little.  No hard feelings and all that.  Mom tried to paint his portrait (he even posed for her!), but Dad wouldn't get out of the way, and she eventually had to give up and go to bed.

It was... a rough night, but at least it all turned out well in the end.  It was the first scare we've had, and now I have a feeling what the rest of my life is going to be like.  Most of the people I'll know and love will die before I do, how can I handle that?

The next day, Dad decided to renovate the house.  He knew it was rough having Hati in the same room as Shari and I (apparently I'd shared Mom and Dad's room when I was her age), so he worked all day long to give us this new set-up.

There are two basements, the lowest of which he's calling the museum.  The door is locked and our paintings and things on our walls have disappeared, so they're probably down there.  Dad's just... strange like that, he'll tell me what's going on when he's ready to.  He also added a small garden in the backyard, gated, as though he knows what Hati's future is going to be.

He filled it with plants from Shang Simla and martial arts equipment.  His regular garden has a gate around it now, and he put in a small pond in the backyard as well, stocking it with a few Death Fish.

I spent more and more time with my daughter, realizing how many people she would have to lose too.

She still loves that doll.

One night after Dad got home, he went into her room and got her out of her crib.  It was her birthday!

Didn't she turn out lovely?

Then, a few days later, Grim came to our house.  Mom was 101, she'd been tinkering with a few of the appliances around the house, brushed up on her cooking, the usual things she did in her old age.  When she married Dad, she'd quit her part-time job to paint and sculpt, and now...

She lived a good, long life, and passed quietly in her sleep.  Dad and I had braced ourselves for this to happen, and while we were affected, of course, it wasn't as bad for us as it was for Shari and Hati.

For now, her headstone is in the backyard.  Rest in peace Mom, I love you.

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« Reply #16 on: April 26, 2012, 09:38:17 AM »
Congratulations on your first immortal and RIP Ruby!  And if you ever want to know if people are reading just check the views.  Frivolous posts are discouraged so a lot of times you won't see people just say "Great update!".

If your view count goes up then it is definitely being read.   I don't pay attention to views because writing the story makes me happy and that's what matters.   

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« Reply #17 on: April 26, 2012, 09:47:07 AM »
I really like the way you write I look forward to reading more.

Like Rica said when I write it is because I enjoy it,it is a bonus if other people want to read it.

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« Reply #18 on: April 26, 2012, 03:24:37 PM »
I read all the stories but I don't post very often.  I wish there was a thumbs up button or a likes button to show that you enjoyed a story without having to post.  I feel that too many posts mess with the flow of the story.   Keep up the good work.

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« Reply #19 on: April 26, 2012, 08:25:40 PM »
Thanks guys, like I sais, I just get a little insecure sometimes, which is ridiculous.  I'll keep all that in mind, and thanks for at least letting me know someone's going over it!


10.  Tut - Birthdays Galore

At least after Mom died, a few good things started happening again.  First of all, the next day, Shari aged up to a full Adult.

She's still as gorgeous as ever.

The day after that, it was my turn.

I had to get rid of the insane hair though.

Everyone was still in a bit of a daze after Mom died, the birthdays didn't help all that much.  We all kept doing what we were doing.  I sculpted and painted, Shari wrote and took up painting so someone could do my portraits since Mom died.  Hati did well in school, and finally had her birthday.  She's a full-fledged teenager now.

Any boy who comes within 100 feet of her is dead.

As soon as she got home from her first day of high school, she started working out.  Already she's almost reached the top of it, it's amazing how fast she can learn it.  She's brave, athletic, disciplined, but somehow, also a bit of a daredevil.  I'm sure she'd set the house on fire just to see if she could put it out.  Oh well, you have to have a little crazy in with all the good I suppose.

Mom comes out every now and then to visit, she and Dad are still very much in love.

One day, we realized one of the paparazzi who hang around the house decided to die.  None of us really wanted to see Grim so soon, so we tried to stay inside so we wouldn't have to deal with anything.  It sounds bad, I know, but what could we really do?  We didn't even know the man.

The only reason Dad hung around is because he was trying to work on his garden at the time.

I bought the Bookstore and the fish hatchery.  All I had to do with the hatchery was add a picnic table and it was fully upgraded in the town's eyes.  We decided to let Hati pick out what she wanted to buy, and for some reason she chose the Grocery store and the Cemetary.  ...I'm... not sure what to do with her right now.  But that's what she wanted (well, she wanted the gym, but we couldn't afford it yet), so we bought them both and let her upgrade the cemetary.  Now it has an Egyptian mausoleum in the back corner of it, some kind of tribute to Dad, I think.

Dad threw a party for Hati and a bunch of the boys she met at school, I think he wanted to find her someone to marry when she's old enough.  She really didn't go for it too well, but I took the time to add a few best friends to add to my life.  I've done a few more opportunities, and all I have to do before I eat ambrosia like Dad did, is get my Elder portrait done.  Not bad, right?

Time came for Hati to go to prom, but she still hadn't found a boyfriend, so she went alone like I did.  Not that there's anything wrong with it, of course.  She wanted to take 'Bobo' with her, and she's even recruited her mother and grandfather to her cause.  Dad's out looking for Rainbow gems whenever he has time, and Shari's been dabbling with the chemistry set she bought one day.  Anyway, one of the boys she went to school with admitted he liked her, apparently, so they hung around each other during prom.  He even backed her up when she got into a few fights!  Chip off the old block, that one...  She was even elected prom queen!  I wonder if we can keep this trend going through every generation?

Finally caught up to where I am in-game.  From now on, I'll finally go slower, aha.

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« Reply #20 on: April 26, 2012, 11:48:00 PM »
11.  Tut - The New Guy

Shari won the contest.  She got the chemicals mixed together before Dad found a Rainbow Gem, and proudly handed it over to Hati as soon as she came home from school.  Apparently both Shari and Dad had noticed the weird little doll moves sometimes whenever Hati isn't around, does that mean the thing's alive?  I don't know, but considering everything I've seen so far, I'm willing to believe it.  Whatever happened, I wanted to watch, see if there was any truth to it at all.  Something happened as soon as she held it out in front of her.

Huh.  Hati's not crazy after all!  Everyone, breathe a sigh of relief, my baby's not insane...

As soon as everyone could see Bobo, they started flirting.  Should I be worried about this?  Apparently the imaginary friend she'd had since she was little was in love with her.

They shared a few hugs and finally a kiss, and agreed to date each other.  I was watching from Shari and I's bedroom, I couldn't help myself.  I knew Dad had done the same thing with me, so... maybe it's just a father thing?

Anyway, I guess she could do a lot worse.  He's a grumpy sort, but he's neat and a perfectionist, and he wants to be a teacher.  Also, he's really not that bad looking.

After doing his homework (he started going to school with Hati the day after he... transformed?), he brushed up on his charisma skills.  We're not too sure what to do with him just now.

More good news!  A few days after all this, both Hati and Bobo aged up to Young Adults on the same day.  Hati went first, wouldn't have it any other way.

Again, the most beautiful girl I've ever seen.  I'm a lucky man to have such a pretty daughter.  Still worried about it though...

Bobo went next.

...okay, she definitely could have done worse.  Bobo's not that bad, I guess.

The next day, Hati went out and explored the little training area Dad had put in for her.  She loved it, and immediately started training with the dummy.

Of course, this was the same day as graduation for both her and Bobo.  [It broke.  Only Bobo seemed to graduate, I dunno what happened...]

I think this is it for me.  About time for Hati to tell things from now on.  I just have to get one more portrait done when I become and Elder and I'll be immortal like Dad is.  Let's just hope Hati agrees to go with this too.  Wish me luck!

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« Reply #21 on: April 27, 2012, 10:54:20 PM »
12.  Hatshepsut - Getting Married

So Pop and Gramps told me about all this and handed this thing to me, told me to start writing in it too.  Eh, whatever, I'll go along with it, for awhile at least.  We'll see how long it goes, I'll be game for it if it's not that rough, I guess.  On the other hand, I love a challenge.  I just don't want to see a bunch of people I love die, you know?  But I also love Gramps, and if this'll help him, what choice do I really have?

So let's see, Pop last wrote about the graduation, so let's go on after that.

When we got home from graduation, Mom, Pop, and Gramps all went to bed.  Of course they did, I don't know if they were in on what Bobo's plan was, or if it's just because they're old, but we were just there together now.  He seemed nervous, though I don't know why.  We'd been best friends before he was even real, so it wasn't like we didn't know each other.  For awhile we just talked.

Well, flirted, more like. Until he shifted around a little, finally dropping to one knee and surprising me with this.

Of course I said yes!  I knew I loved him, but this much?  It surprised even me, you know?  But we couldn't wait for them all to wake up, we wanted this moment to ourselves.

We got married right there, without waiting for a moment.  We'd waited for each other long enough already, hadn't we?

Then, of course, we had the customary... ahem... celebration...

I didn't want to stop working out, and I really wanted to take advantage of the workout area outside Gramps had built for me.  Kept getting sick though, had to run into the house every once in awhile to throw up.  Mom gave me a look every now and then when she broke herself away from her computer.  She's been obsessed with writing more and more as she gets older, says something about writing a masterpiece before she dies.  Mom's a great writer!  What wouldn't be considered a masterpiece in the future?  Oh well, it's a good source of income, she makes at least $15,000 a week in royalties.  I keep getting better and better at martial arts, every time I work at it, it seems like I get a new belt.  I've already done all I can with my athletic skills, just a few more strength workouts and it'll be supermaxed.

Anyway!  Found out soon enough why I kept getting sick.  Yup, morning sickness.

Everyone was thrilled, but I was a little bummed I couldn't work out with any of my equipment while I was pregnant.  Even if the doctors told me it was alright, like any of the family would let me do it.  Found a way around it though!  Worked out with the tv.

Didn't seem long enough, really, and I went into labor.  Made Bobo go back to sleep though, no sense in both of us staying awake at once.

And soon enough, my son was born!  I let Bobo name him, like Pop and Gramps before me.

Welcome to the world, Ramses!


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« Reply #22 on: April 28, 2012, 07:23:04 AM »
A lot has happened! Congrats with the wedding and the nooboo. ;D

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« Reply #23 on: April 28, 2012, 11:23:55 AM »
Wow you have been busy. Congratulations on the new baby.

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« Reply #24 on: April 28, 2012, 03:03:32 PM »
Thanks!  Yep, I... get bored when I'm not at work and my daughter's asleep.


13.  Hatshepsut - Another Immortal?

As soon as Gramps knew about Ramses (things get around fast in this house, I think men gossip more than women do), he pulled out the building plans and started changing the house again.  He didn't want the house to just be a ground floor for living and a basement for a few skills some of us might have, so he managed almost a full redesign of the above-ground part of the house.

He added posts around the outside of the house before building the upper story.  Gramps said he didn't want the upper story to be quite as big as the ground floor, but to have a deck around it so the family can sit outside.  Once more generations start living up there, I'm sure there will be quite a few objects out on the deck.  At least he had the common sense to add a little fence around the outside of the deck.  Who knows what idiots might fall off the thing if they could.

There are four bedrooms upstairs for four immortals (I guess), and Gramps said something about changing the bedrooms on the ground floor in another generation or so.  Kinda hope he doesn't forget.
[I'm definitely not a builder, but I'm still pleased with how this one's turning out.  I guess I've never really had to build on my own before though.]

Mom aged up just a couple days later.  She's still a pretty woman, and she still sits in front of her computer, still muttering things about a Masterpiece.

She didn't want to go grey either.

Next night, both Pops and Ramses grew up, too.

Haha, Ramses has Bobo hair!  He got a doll in the mail not too long ago, just like what Bobo was before he became real.  Is that the destiny of this one too?

I've been working on my board breaker, so Pop decided to help teach Ramses a few things.

Of course, Bobo and I don't want to be left out either, so we do what we can when we're not at work.  That's the good thing about having a couple old guys puttering around the house all day.  At least we know Ramses will get attention!

To be honest, I'm just glad Mom gets some time with her grandson.  They're adorable together.

I managed to finish my lifetime wish of Physical Perfection, as well!  I got my last belt in martial arts while training with my board breaker in the backyard.

Not bad, right?

Mom painted Pops' last portrait, his Elder one.  Gramps grabbed him and dragged him into the kitchen, whipped up a couple plates of Ambrosia, and made him dig in at the same time.

At age 70, Pops joined the ranks of the immortals!  Not bad, right?  He did it faster than Gramps did, from what I've been told.