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Cinderella - A Sims 3 Retelling
« on: October 18, 2014, 02:14:06 AM »
Thanks go to my good friend, Simmerqueen, who collaborated with me on this story which was written some time ago.  She took the wonderful photos and I wrote the words.  I think we made a wicked team but I will leave that up to you to judge.  Please enjoy my retelling, sims style, of Cinderella.

Introducing Ella

The young master had come to Ella the night of the day she had turned sixteen.  How sweet he had been that night; so loving and gentle.





Her heart had soared. She loved him so much.


He wasn’t like that much anymore and that saddened her.


Some nights the boy she loved would be there and he would touch her face affectionately and tell her she was beautiful but there were other times when he was moody or distracted and she felt she mattered less than the fine leather boots that rested on the cold, bare floorboards of her room.



Those nights, she would weep softly to herself after he had gone and wish she had not had the misfortune to give her heart to a prince.



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« Reply #1 on: October 18, 2014, 06:29:27 PM »
The Housekeeper

Ella was collecting the clean linen one morning when Mrs Keaton, the housekeeper and the scourge of the house servants, had pulled her to one side. 

Mrs Keaton was stern and unsmiling and barely spoke to such as Ella except to sniff down her nose and point out a smudge on the railing or smear on the candlesticks. Ella’s heart had leapt to her mouth as she faced those icy blue eyes.

Mrs Keaton had grabbed her by her elbow and steered her firmly to a secluded nook at the end of the hallway.



'I have heard a disturbing rumour.’  Mrs Keaton frowned down at the nervous girl.

Ella was terrified. The girls were all leery of Mrs Keaton. She was quick to box the ears of the clumsy or lazy servant and her sharp tongue had reduced many a serving maid to tears.

She blushed to the tips of her ears but stubbornly, bravely kept her silence. She studied a spot on the floor aware of the beating of her pulse in her ears and a smell of wood polish mingled with the perfume of the freshly laundered linen in her arms. The silence of the upper floor was broken only by the muffled sounds from the courtyard drifting in through the open window at the end of the hall.



The housekeeper sighed. Ella dared to look up and was startled at the sadness and compassion in those blue eyes where she had expected to see anger and disgust.



'I pity you, Ella, for there is no joy down the road you have chosen and only heartbreak awaits you.'

 She fixed Ella with a fierce stare.

‘Sometimes even our betters, especially if they are young and self-centred, make errors of judgement.  It is up to us to be wiser and to use our common sense to protect our own interests. ’

'And,' She continued, 'Where there is no common sense to be had, then I will order it so.' 

'This will stop, Ella.  No, do not protest.  In this you will obey.'



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« Reply #2 on: October 18, 2014, 07:37:56 PM »
Hello!

I love fairy tale re-tellings, great start and I hope to see more soon. Ella is gorgeous ;)
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« Reply #3 on: October 19, 2014, 07:59:40 PM »
Thanks Brooke.  I hope you enjoy the rest of it.

Ella is gorgeous.  I don't remember who she was now but she played her part well.  ;D


Agnes Keaton


Agnes removed the bunch of jangling keys from her waistband and pulled the pins from her disciplined hair.

Free now, it flowed down her back in rippling waves. She picked up a brush. Her hair used to be her best feature once, thick and glossy and streaked with gold.



She sighed deeply but her concerns were not with her hair. She had long ago accepted the fact that she was no longer young and pretty and the delight of … well never mind that. What to do about Ella?  She frowned at her reflection.

Sally

Sally ran her dusting cloth over the railings. Her eyes felt gritty and sore. She knew it was from being kept awake half the night by her roommate crying over his royal arrogance. She had to give him up.  Keaton was on her case.  Yeah, that would do it for most of them.



'How can I turn him away?' Ella had sobbed, miserable in her self-pity. 'He is my life, my happiness. '

Sally's eyes met Moll's across the bowed head of their friend.   Both were helpless in the face of such sorrow.

Poor beautiful Ella. 

Silently she thanked her lucky stars that she had been born homely and there was no danger that she would have to send his royal sleaziness off with a flea in his ear.  She would however miss the silver piece the young master often dispensed to her and Moll to shoo them off.  Handy it was, the extra money. 

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« Reply #4 on: October 20, 2014, 06:48:59 AM »
I wonder if Agnes also went through something similar when she was younger, she is still lovely at her age  :)
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« Reply #5 on: October 20, 2014, 06:27:37 PM »
Ha ha, yes.  I think Agnes is definitely a woman with a past and many secrets.  ;D

Ella and My Lady's Gown

Ella carried the heavy, tissue wrapped gown carefully up the curved staircase.

She was not normally permitted to use these stairs but this was a special circumstance. She had been charged with delivering my Lady’s ball gown to her dressing room. 

At the top of the stairs she padded down the carpeted hallway until she came to an elaborately decorated door. Balancing her load she tapped on the door and then turned the door handle to enter. 

Her breath caught in her throat. She had never seen such a magnificent room in her whole life.



The walls were decorated with bright portraits of beautiful women and paintings of flowers in elaborate vases. Silk drapes hung from the high windows. To one side was a huge mirror which reflected the rich furnishings and delicate furniture.







Carefully Ella placed the gown on a polished pale wooden table where carvings of fawns and forest animals chased each other up the curved legs. 

The quiet of the room unnerved her a little. Sunlight from the  open windows played across the floor and burnished the gold filigree on the vases and ornaments on the dresser. A statue of a scantily draped youth watched her with blind marble eyes from the corner of the room. 

Slowly she removed the tissue protecting the gown, finally exposing the frothy confection of lace and silk, ribbons and embroidery.

Ella sighed. Such a beautiful dress. Reverently she picked it up and carried it to the mirror. She held it full length in front of her and imagined herself dressed like a fine lady at the ball. 






She danced, twirling around on her toes.

‘Ella!’

Mrs Keaton was standing in the doorway. ‘What nonsense is this?’


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« Reply #6 on: October 21, 2014, 04:05:52 AM »
Beautiful bedroom, I can't blame Ella for daydreaming as I'd do the same myself.
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« Reply #7 on: October 21, 2014, 06:53:28 PM »
Yes, it is beautiful.  My friend went to a lot of trouble staging the scenes for the photos.  I was so amazed when I saw them.  :)


Secret Ways

‘Beg pardon, ma'am.’ Ella was mortified.

Face burning, she carried the dress to the wardrobe and placed it on a hanger. She was very aware of those disapproving eyes of ice following her every move.

‘Foolish girl,’ Mrs Keaton scolded. ‘If my Lady had caught you, you would be out on your ear and nothing I could say would save you.’

Ella sniffed back a tear.

‘Stop dreaming, Ella.’ Mrs Keaton’s voice was softer. ‘Pretty gowns and Balls are not for such as you and I. Not normally anyway.’

Mrs Keaton’s voice faded to almost a whisper and she gazed off into the distance. 



Ella stood before her, nervously twisting her fingers unsure if she should leave as Mrs Keaton appeared to have lost interest in her.

'Come with me, Ella.' 

Ella startled as Mrs Keaton returned to the present and seemingly had come to some sort of decision. Obediently, she followed the fast walking housekeeper running to keep pace.

Down long corridors they went and up several flights of stairs. 



Ella almost collided with her as the housekeeper stopped suddenly. She looked up and down the long corridor, then, satisfied that it was deserted she pressed a panel in the wall.

'Tell no-one.' She hissed. There was a click and the wall opened like a door.

'Quickly,' she urged and she tugged Ella into the space behind the now open wall.

'This palace is riddled with secret passages,' Mrs Keaton told her as she struck a light to a candle. 'Very few know of them. The King, of course, but not many others.'

She held the candle aloft and a dim light lit a dark, musty passage. 'Follow me. Be careful because the floor is not even.'

'There are many branches from this one. Even I do not know where most of them lead.' She explained as they walked.

Ella felt cobwebs brush her face. She did not like spiders.


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« Reply #8 on: October 22, 2014, 05:27:20 AM »
I hope your friend reads the comments too, I commend her work on the sets - I know it takes me at least a day to create a small scene and most of the set doesn't even make it into the screenshot.
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« Reply #9 on: October 22, 2014, 07:04:56 PM »
Yes, I am sure she is reading  ;D and will be pleased at your praise. 

The Chest

'We are not here today to explore the passages though they will prove useful to our task.' Mrs Keaton said.

'We are here to retrieve something I hid many years ago.'

Ella was intrigued. Mrs Keaton was certainly proving to be much more interesting than the stuffy old spinster she and her fellow serving maids assumed. She could appreciate now how it was that the housekeeper was privy to all the goings on. How easy to slip through secret passageways to spy on the palace occupants. The woman must have a thousand secrets in her head.

At last they stopped. They had reached the end of the passage which widened out into a small room filled with boxes and other objects difficult to make out in the flickering candle light.

Mrs Keaton tugged on a small chest, partly covered by a cloth. The cloth hadn't done much to protect it because it was thick with dust.

Ella strode forward to help.

Together, they extracted the chest. Miss Keaton wiped the dust away with the cloth. It floated away in a thick cloud that tickled their nostrils. Ella stifled a sneeze.



'This belonged to Sarah of Wintersong.' The housekeeper said quietly.


'It's a long story and a sad one and maybe one day you will hear it told. Right now, we must move this chest to my room, quickly because we have been gone a while, and carefully so that we don't get caught. The passageways will help. Come, grab a handle. It is not so heavy that the two of us can't manage it.'

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« Reply #10 on: October 23, 2014, 06:59:34 AM »
I can't wait to find out who Sarah is or was, Wintersong is such a lovely name.
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« Reply #11 on: October 23, 2014, 06:59:40 PM »
Thank you.  I liked the name too.  More about Sarah coming right up. ;D

King Henry

Henry hardly ever thought of Sarah anymore.

Now and then a wisp of a memory would intrude into his thoughts but it evoked no more passion than the recollection of a fine meal, a glass of excellent wine or a favourite horse he had once owned.



For many years though, his every waking thought had been consumed by her. 

In the beginning it had been love.  A helpless, hopeless love. 

How his heart had quickened its beat at the sparkle in her eyes and the mischief in her dimpled smile. 

How entrancing the sweet curve of her body tightly laced into her bodice, the quirk of an eyebrow, the scent of her hair, the joyful music of her laughter. 



How he had marvelled at his big clumsy hands almost circling her tiny waist as he lifted her down from her horse. 

She, as light as fairy-dust in his arms, would smile up at him, her cheeks flushed pink from the exercise and the nearness of their contact. 

They would draw back then.  Move to put a decorous distance between themselves ever aware that their control could evaporate like mist in the sun.

But she was always slowest to move. 

How she had teased him with those lowered eyelashes. 

Poor dull Henry.  Always so honourable.

He had loved her and despaired. Later she had disgusted him.

Queen Iris

The Queen strode into her dressing room accompanied by her ladies maid, the ever-reliable Susan.

'I have no interest in this Ball.' She sighed.



'My lady will be the Belle for certain,' Susan said firmly, taking the frothy gown from the wardrobe.

'Ah Susan. Your words are sweet even if you are a terrible liar,' Laughed Iris.



'I don't think I would ever have been the Belle of the Ball even when I was young and carefree. Now the years have weighed heavily on my shoulders, and alas, my waistline.  Do you think you can cinch me in a little more? Work your magic, Susan for I need all the help I can get.'

'I could never compete with her in looks or for his affections.'  Iris mused to herself but kept her silence even in front of her most trusted maid servant.

She had carried the heartache all her married life and was not about to confess her bitterness now.



Would-be Queens don't expect to marry for love. Iris had been bartered like a prized cow for her lands and riches and the strength of an alliance with her father's court.

The winner of her hand, was Henry.  Handsome, dashing Henry with his long lean limbs and a smile that lit fires in her blood.

Charming, captivating Henry who was in love with a ward of his court, Sarah of Wintersong.

Sarah, who had no money and no lands, no claim to anything but a distant blood tie and the key to his heart.

Prince Edmund

Tonight is the Ball.

My parents are hoping I will find my future bride so they do not have to go to the trouble of finding one for me. I think they grow impatient with my indecision. I'm guessing already which likely prospects have been invited and I am not keen. I could list them on my fingers, big noses, buck teeth, pointed chins, no chins at all, dull, boring, ugly. Need I go on? We will wear masks until midnight and then I must act surprised when whoever the lucky girl is I am then dancing with reveals her lack of good fortune. I will wager  I can name each and every girl before the unmasking. I hope I don't die of boredom first.



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« Reply #12 on: October 24, 2014, 07:22:37 AM »
I love Edmund's personality, however shallow he may be  ;) Iris is stunning, the woes of a princess in an arranged marriage is always sad.
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« Reply #13 on: October 24, 2014, 07:01:45 PM »
Thanks Brooke.  I have a soft spot for him too. ;D

Molly

Molly wondered where Ella could have got to.

She was supposed to be helping with the table settings but she had not seen her all afternoon.



Silly chit. If old Mrs Keaton caught her skiving off there would be hell to pay.

She liked Ella. What could there be not to like? She was pretty, but modest. She had a gentle way of talking, not rough like her and Sal and her movements were graceful and fluid. She moved like a fine lady, her footsteps light even in her sturdy work boots. 

It was a pity she was such an idiot.

The gown

Ella watched, barely breathing, as Mrs Keaton opened the chest. Inside, wrapped carefully in many layers of fine silk was a gown.



Mrs Keaton lifted it out and laid it with great reverence on her bed.

Ella could have sworn she saw tears in Mrs Keaton's eyes as she gently smoothed the creases from the fabric.

'King Henry said her possessions had to be burned.' Miss Keaton was not really talking to her. Her gaze was far away, lost in a memory of days gone by.



'He was so angry with her.  He wanted nothing of her's around to remind him or the court.'

She reached into the chest and retrieved some tiny dancing slippers, trimmed with fur. 

'I could not let him burn her things. Not everything. I hid this trunk where no-one would ever find it.'

'You disobeyed the King?' Ella was astonished.

'I was her personal maid.  I arranged her hair, laid out her clothes, was privy to many of her secrets.  My loyalties forever laid with her.  I would have left with her if she had but asked.  I would have gone to the pits of Hell with her and surely that is where she did go.  Yes, I have disobeyed and deceived and this night, through you, I will commit my most outrageous deception yet.'  Agnes' eyes flashed with fire.

'But it feels right, and so I justify it to myself.' She continued softly.

 'Tonight you will go to the ball, Ella Ashe.'



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« Reply #14 on: October 25, 2014, 05:24:56 AM »
Again I say very well done with the dining room décor, the colours and patterns used show how lavish the royal castle is. I like the replacment of Ashe for Cinder  :) Can't wait to find out what Sarah did to get such disdain from the King.
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« Reply #15 on: October 25, 2014, 06:21:05 PM »
Thank you, Brooke.  I love the decor too.   ;D

Sally

Mr James, the butler, gave his permission for any of the staff who were not engaged in serving to watch the arrival of the guests.

We had to stay hidden and quiet. Anyone who giggled or made a noise would feel his wrath. He had been quite stern about that.

So Moll and I had chosen a good vantage point on the upper floor. 

We lay on our bellies, noses pressed against the balustrades, peering down into the court room below.

We sighed over the footmen, handsome and proud in their livery and admired the finely curved muscles in their stockinged calves.

'I'll bet he has padded his,' Moll smirked pointing to one who thought too much of himself.



'Probably padded elsewhere as well.' We stifled our giggles.



We gushed over the beautiful women, expensively gowned with lavish hair and glittering jewels.

We drooled over the sight of the platters of exotic food being wheeled in through the large double doors. Aromas spicy and pungent drifted up to tease our nostrils. 

As upper servants, we had been spared the anguish of the kitchen staff, the temper tantrums, tears and raw nerves that had gone into concocting the exquisite confections.

We wondered again where Ella could have got to. Too bad that she was missing this.

We watched until the last visitor was ushered in and the main doors closed but neither Moll nor I could recall the arrival of the mystery woman who was to cause such a to do at the Ball and for weeks following.

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« Reply #16 on: October 26, 2014, 12:10:49 PM »
It's interested that you switched to first person narrative for this part, I felt it made it more of a personal experience and loved the conversation between them  ;D
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« Reply #17 on: October 26, 2014, 06:42:24 PM »
Thanks Brooke.  I enjoyed their conversation too.
I tend to switch all over the place.  I am sure I break all the rules of writing a story ;D 

Ella

I couldn't believe my reflection in the mirror in Mrs Keaton's bedroom. A stunningly beautiful fairy princess gazed back at me.  I thought I would surely faint.



'I can't do it.'

My nerves had given way. 'How can I fool them all? They will see through the disguise. They will laugh at my clumsiness and ridicule my pretence.  I will trip on my gown and mix up the dance steps.  I will be disgraced and dismissed.'

Mrs Keaton looked me in the eye.

'You can take the chance on having the best time in your life or you can back out and go back to being a simple servant. Of course it is a risk.

'There is a very real chance of you being caught out but,' She paused, her eyes bright and two spots of colour in her cheeks.

'I believe, in my soul, that you can carry it off. You have a special air about you, Ella. You do not realise your difference from the others and the confidence which clings to your every move.  I would not have involved myself in this mad escapade if I doubted you for a moment.'

I drew a deep breath. I would not back out. Mrs Keaton fastened my mask in place and led me through the secret passageways.

'Remember,' She cautioned, ''Midnight means unmasking so make certain you leave before then.'

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« Reply #18 on: October 27, 2014, 10:04:50 AM »
Ella is even more beautiful dressed up, looking forward to seeing her at the ball  ;D
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« Reply #19 on: October 27, 2014, 06:55:18 PM »
Me too.  It's my favourite part.   ;D

Prince Edmund

The Prince's jaw dropped when he spied the newcomer.



She stood, uncertain, a little awkwardly in the archway. Her golden hair lay in gentle waves down her long and graceful neck. 

Atop her head, a glittering tiara caught the light of a thousand candles and twinkled with red, yellow and blue brilliance. 

Stray wisps of hair framed her small, perfect face. His eyes wandered down her neck to the hollow at her throat, smooth white shoulders, tiny waist disappearing into the cloud of silk that was her gown.

Her back was straight and her head held high.



He bowed low before her.

'My lady. Would you do me the honour of the next dance?'



Queen Iris

Who is she, that girl with my son? Do I dare ask my husband?

Perhaps she is his latest dalliance, but no. She is much too young even for him and he would not want to share such a jewel with his son. 

Why is there a nagging at the back of my mind? There is something familiar. I know these feelings. I should not ignore them.



King Henry

Henry watched the happy dancers, his gaze resting on his son's beautiful partner.

The boy should really be spreading himself amongst the rest of his guests.

It was poor form to monopolize one woman all night but who could blame the lad?

Sarah.

Why did he think of her now? So long ago.

He remembered the last time he had seen her dance. Her eyes had been blazing with fire and her colour was high.

He shifted in his chair and tried to dismiss his memories. He didn't need to spoil his evening  by reminding himself of events best forgotten.

Surreptitiously, he glanced at Iris sitting as ever by his side.



She had more than vindicated his father's choice. She had proved to be an admirable Queen and support to him, intelligent, noble and just.

He doubted if the passionate, emotional Sarah would have been such an asset to the Kingdom.



Still, and he had to smile, it would have been a wild ride.


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« Reply #20 on: October 28, 2014, 02:56:50 PM »
Stupid prince, how could he not recognise her? The blurred edges of the pictures are a nice touch to the dreamy and reminiscence of the characters.
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« Reply #21 on: October 28, 2014, 06:42:44 PM »
Yes, he obviously needs glasses  ;D

I love the photo effects my friend used.  She did such an amazing job on the whole thing.

Ella

Everywhere Ella's senses were assailed. 

She felt as unsubstantial as the finest gossamer blowing in a summer breeze and her feet in their dancing slippers barely seemed to touch the floor. 

The jewellery of the women flashed and dazzled the eyes;


the waft from their powders and perfumes  – violets, roses, lavender – merged into a tantalizing fragrance to blend with the aroma from the platters of delicious food that the footmen snaked through the crowds;



the bright and cheery music that filled the room with rhythms making it impossible to keep her feet still; the rustle of silken gowns;



the snippets of conversation as people danced past or the sudden high peel of girlish laughter;



the men, colourful peacocks in their expensive finery bowing to her, begging her for a dance if only the Prince would relinquish her for a moment.



But his grasp on her arm was firm and there was no doubt that he would not be sharing this treasure. 

When she twirled away in a dance, he would be waiting at the end of the reel to reclaim her again, his face, so close to her, so achingly familiar despite the mask.



'Who are you?' He had begged many times.

She had smilingly shaken her head and pointed to her mask, reminding him that it was supposed to be a secret for the time being.  She didn't trust herself to speak.

Prince Edmund

Who is she this enigma, this stranger? No women I know match with her. Those lips look so delicious. I long to taste them.



Is she a gift from my parents perhaps? My father, the King, of course. That must be it. Who would have thought the old man could have such exquisite taste?

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« Reply #22 on: October 29, 2014, 09:45:16 AM »
The guests are so beautifully dressed, I feel sorry for them not getting enoug attention from the prince and Ella  ;D
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« Reply #23 on: October 29, 2014, 06:48:36 PM »
Yes, it was very rude of the prince but I don't think Ella minded.  ;D

Time

TWELVE

Ella startled as if suddenly woken from a pleasant dream.



A clock had begun to chime the hour and the crowd around her were good-humouredly counting down the gongs.

ELEVEN

The unmasking at midnight.

TEN

Had time flown by so fast? She had to run.

NINE

'Excuse me, Your Highness,' She bobbed a quick curtsey, her servant's training had asserted itself in her haste to escape and, gathering her skirts, she fled from him.

EIGHT

A panic took hold of her. 

SEVEN

She wove her way through the press of people. So many people.  Surprised glances as she slipped past.

SIX

She heard the Prince's voice calling to her. Above the noise of the crowd, the chatter and the music she heard his anguished plea for her to stop, to return to him.



FIVE

'Excuse me please'.

FOUR

'Pardon.'

THREE

The door.  Thankfully it was open and no footman to question her.

TWO

At last she was through.

ONE

She ran. Her lungs felt as if they were bursting. She dashed around the corner praying there would be no-one in the hallway, no-one to witness her as she pressed the secret panel.

Her heart beat as loud as a drum. Her hands shook.

'Please.' She prayed for a little more time, just a minute longer. She was certain she could hear voices coming her way.

The doorway opened a fraction and she pulled it open just far enough to slide inside the passageway.

'Drat.'

The heel of her slipper had wedged itself in a groove along the floor.

Her foot was stuck in the gap between the panel and the hallway outside.

Hurriedly she pulled her foot from the slipper and twisting and turning managed to push it outside into the hallway.

No time to rescue it now because she could definitely hear voices.

The panel closed with a snap and she was alone in the dark with just her heaving lungs.

With shaking fingers she lit a candle and limped her way back to the housekeeper's room.


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Re: Cinderella - A Sims 3 Retelling
« Reply #24 on: October 30, 2014, 10:59:02 AM »
I liked your idea of her slipper getting stuck rather than her 'accidentally' losing it in a hurry.
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